Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Nowadays, thanks to social media and the internet, the number of celebrities has increased significantly and they are being seen by all kinds of people in different ages more than ever. Personally, I believe that their statements are more effective for people who are in lower age, than older ones. I feel this way because of two reasons, which will be elaborated in the following essay.
First of all, adolescents are more into imitating other people in various aspects of their life. As a fact, their thoughts are not formed completely. Moreover, they like to seem charming and independent, and since they are not confident enough to find their own way to reach success, they try imitating successful individuals. As a result, celebrities, as the epitome of our modern world's successful people, become the number one influencer of teenagers' lifestyles. Most of adults, however, are significantly mature to know that everyone should choose his/her specific path of living.
Second of all, youth obviously watch more TV programs and spend more time on the internet and social medias such as Instagram and Youtube. Consequently, they see athletes, players, musician and other popular persons more than their parents. Thus, it would be apparent that those opinions and actions have more effect on children, rather than the elderly. My experience could be a compelling example of this. When I was a high school student, most of my free time had been allocated to watching movies and TV series. Meanwhile, I got interested in following my favourite characters' real life and ideas, as a result of which most my behaviours and conversations were borrowed from them.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that celebrities play more effective role in teenagers' life than older people's. That is because youth are more vulnerable to be affected by attractive characters, and because they spend more time following programs and events which celebrities participate.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 467, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'Most of', you should use 'the' ('Most of the adults') or simply say ''Most adults''.
Suggestion: Most of the adults; Most adults
...one influencer of teenagers lifestyles. Most of adults, however, are significantly mature to k...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, however, if, moreover, second, so, thus, while, i feel, in conclusion, such as, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1642.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 317.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17981072555 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8543684276 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.593059936909 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 513.0 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.5029666607 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.625 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8125 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.875 5.45110844103 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225783887513 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0688052356881 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0542133375811 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138480803855 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0318917941298 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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