Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Television advertising directed toward young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Many people believe that television advertising directed towards the young children should be allowed. For me, although there are many benefits for not allowing such advertisement; there are many cases in which its good to allow. In this essay, i'll address some problems associated with denial of such permission.
First of all, the products advertised on television can help to increase children's creativity. I have witnessed it in my personal life. My 4 years old niece was watching television where found a drawing book. Afterwards, she asked my sisters to buy one for her. When my sister brought that to home, i was surprised to see different levels of drawing in one book. For the first level it required just colour filling and at top level, the children had to imitate a given model. As a result of completing that drawing book, my niece has improved her modeling skills in very early age. Therefore, we can see how an advertisement can improve children's intellectual power.
Secondly, participation of other children in television advertisements can improve lifestyle of children. Few examples to consider are ways of dressing and speaking. When i was a child, I had observed my friends improving their physical appearance by observing other children in advertisements. At that time, a child named John was shown on television for advertisement of an ice cream. The child used to wear a leather jacket in that ad. When my friend observed him, he bought one for himself and it did suite on him quite well. Additionally, he learned some English words from those ads. Consequently, such advertisements improved his daily lifestyle.
What is half full to some may appeal half empty to others. Similarly, many people may feel that TV advertisements may make some children obstinate for getting things right away. But this does not appeal to me because people (and hence the children) learn from their own mistakes. At one time, if a child gets some product and later on they don't like it, they can easily exclude such items from their choice. It have seen such behavior in my nephew. He purchased a video game after watching an advertisement on TV. Later on, he came to know that the game had not that much features as advertised. Therefore, now he asks others as well before buying something.
Putting all my discussion together lead me to believe that TV ads for young children should be permitted. As i have mentioned my analysis that it can improve their creativity, lifestyle and decision-making power.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, hence, if, may, second, secondly, similarly, so, therefore, well, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2099.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 422.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97393364929 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88535791756 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.57345971564 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 651.6 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.0111564832 48.9658058833 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 72.3793103448 100.406767564 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.5517241379 20.6045352989 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.03448275862 5.45110844103 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133400587443 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0398253849267 0.076458572812 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0698010289841 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0859619438713 0.150856017488 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0428287123939 0.0645574589148 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.95 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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