Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The job has a greater effect on one’s overall happiness than the social life does.
Throughout history, human does anything and anywhere to provide themselves happiness, which helps living better in a society. There are several perspectives that there are various indispensable factors which lead humans to find their happiness such as persons’ job and social life. Moreover, as far as I am concerned, persons’ jobs play a big role in humans’ happiness for several reasons which I explore two of them aptly in the following essay.
To begin with, people jobs provide a good economical circumstance that can be ended to bring them happiness. All societies, all around the world, experience various economic circumstances which determine their people’s lives going on which track. Therefore, if one society lives in a harsh economic circumstances, its people’s nerves, spirit and body involve in this situation and get their happiness away, and if one society lives in a opposite circumstance as the later one does, its people just think of themselves and seek to find anything that can bring them happiness. Now, the question is how people’s job participate in their feeling of happiness. Generally speaking, people of a society make their society, and if they had proper job, their jobs would provide a good economical circumstance for them. According to the recent studies, people of the societies who have better work condition experience more feeling of happiness just because of their society economic situation.
Another significant reason which deserves to discuss is that people feel happy if they can buy anything for themselves or for whom they love, which this situation can only be happened if people have proper jobs. Every one of us do our daily routine duties in order to gain money, so what does happen next if we gain a lot of money? Frankly speaking, people think they can do anything they wish; therefore, they feel comfortable and this sense of comfortability makes them feel happiness in their life. My own experience is a compelling example of what I said, before I grew up to be able to work and gain money, I had spent a whole month with my pocket money which my father gave me every month. The amount of money was just appropriate for commuting from our home to high school and getting back. In consequence, I always should think of how money I have in my pocket, and then decide whether I can buy anything or not. When I grow up, I work and gain money for myself and this means that I do not want to be worried about pocket money, so I spend it wherever I want for anyone whom I love.
With all the above factors taken into consideration, people’s happiness depends on their jobs, so not only their jobs provide them a better economic situation, but it also gets them rich. Hence, the fact that people’s happiness depends on several things (e.g. jobs, social life) is undeniable, but people’s job plays crucial role in people jubilance.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: to live; live
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Suggestion: circumstance
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Suggestion: an
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Suggestion:
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...rever I want for anyone whom I love. With all the above factors taken into co...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, e.g., frankly, hence, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2439.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 491.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96741344196 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70728369723 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85223436145 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482688391039 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 756.0 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.4798912249 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.5 100.406767564 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2777777778 20.6045352989 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0720200860626 0.236089414692 31% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0272903691746 0.076458572812 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0254173732137 0.0737576698707 34% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0466846473539 0.150856017488 31% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0233131173804 0.0645574589148 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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