Do you think that young people should have several different types of jobs before they decide on a long-term career?
The debate over the jobs and how to find dream job has always been prominent topic among people. Whereas some people might think that it is better to stay in one job, I am strongly on the belief that different types of jobs experience before deciding for a long-term career have many advantages. In the fallowing paragraphs I will explain my reasons.
To begin, by experiencing different jobs people can their best job, which career suites with their personality. Without doing this strategy they might make bad choice and stuck in bad a condition for long time. For example, imagine someone choose to be marketing specialist. He studied hard in university, when he graduates, he hires as a marketing specialist in a clothing company. Since talking with people and social abilities are requisite for this job, if he was a reserved person, this job would not satisfy him, so he should stay in a job that not fit with his personality.
In addition, experiencing different types of jobs, help people expand their knowledge zone. In this regard, by experiencing different jobs they interact with different people and also faced with different challenges; this situation helps them to learn many things that they could not learn in a single job. For example, when I was student at university, I decided to have a part time job. In that time period, I worked in several companies. In each of those place’s l learned different skills, one of them was clothing company, and I worked there as marketer apprentice. By working there, I learned communication skills including how to convinced other people, and how to present different feature of products. Other things that I learned, was time management, which I learned from my boss in data analysis company.
Finally, it seems to me working in different jobs before choosing long term career has some advantages. Not only can people find their best suited job, but also they can broaden their knowledge horizon.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 240, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'chooses'.
Suggestion: chooses
...long time. For example, imagine someone choose to be marketing specialist. He studied ...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 374, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...dent at university, I decided to have a part time job. In that time period, I worked in s...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, so, whereas, for example, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1632.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 329.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96048632219 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6984514159 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.537993920973 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 501.3 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.1304601804 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.0 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3529411765 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.58823529412 5.45110844103 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.347386115312 0.236089414692 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102019630317 0.076458572812 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101992426037 0.0737576698707 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.224215187435 0.150856017488 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0604263180775 0.0645574589148 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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