funds to improve classes and libraries or on sports and extracurricular activities?
Extracurricular activities are a medium to help shape a well-rounded personality of an individual. It is thus, incumbent on the universities to provide opportunities to students outside of the four walls of a classroom to help them grow and find their niche in the competitive world that awaits them. One way of ensuring this is by allocation of funds to sports and other extracurricular events.
Quality education provision is the primary mandate of any institute. Around the world, universities maintain an environment that is conducive to learning by finding creative ways to increase the students' interest toward studies. They spent exorbitant amounts of money to build state-of-the-art libraries with latest technologically advanced installments to indulge the students. A key aspect of giving the students' a space to take a breather and relax amidst the overwhelming pressure of studies is often however, neglected. Sports grounds, drama theatres, halls for social events should be build instead of repeatedly revamping the libraries and conference rooms, to provide an outlet for students to release their stress. Researches have shown that universities that promote a balance between curricular and extracurricular activities, have students with a higher rate of success in real life.
Simultaneously, universities should allot equal financial support to education and sports to provide the students the creative freedom to explore their capabilities outside of the classroom. Students should embark on different ventures and experiment their luck elsewhere, too. Taking part in social events might help them understand their interests in other realms. For example, up till my Bachelor's degree, I was unaware of my managerial prowess. It was during my university, when I took part in organizing a fund-raising event, that i realised how good I was at logistics and event management. Had there been no opportunity to dabble in such an event, my skills would not have manifested.
In conclusion, libraries and classes are as important in determining a students' future as are extracurricular activities. Hence, it is only logical to distribute funds equally in order to maintain a healthy equilibrium.
- should parents forbid their children to own smart phones 80
- understanding concepts is more important than learning facts Do you agree or disagree 70
- young people should take more risks than adults 76
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Providing internet access is just as important as other services such as building roads so government should offer internet access to all of their citizens at no cost 76
- funds to improve classes and libraries or on sports and extracurricular activities 76
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 537, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...n organizing a fund-raising event, that i realised how good I was at logistics an...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, however, if, so, thus, well, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1877.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 339.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.53687315634 4.8611393121 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.31473391865 2.67179642975 124% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.592920353982 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 588.6 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.9513283729 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.411764706 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9411764706 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.94117647059 5.45110844103 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1766314072 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0543973069472 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0737731719495 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126914465428 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0725020616323 0.0645574589148 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.85 10.9000537634 136% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.56 8.01818996416 119% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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