young people should take more risks than adults?
Risk-taking is a task rather daunting for many people. Putting all your trust in the hands of your fate and taking a leap of faith is ambitious and requires a lot of courage. I believe young people should be open to taking more risks than older people for the reasons discussed below.
Young people have abundant opportunities awaiting them as they step into the real world after completing their education. At this stage, taking calculated risks with their careers when they have nothing to lose is a sensible choice. If the outcome of the risk taken is deplorable, they still have ample time to navigate their lives in conventional ways, conforming to the standard path of doing a corporate job. For instance, after completing his MBA degree, my brother took an ambitious risk to start his own construction business with no prior experience. Despite two years of hard work, his efforts were futile and ended in the realization that he was not ready to venture into the business realm. This risk, however, proved to be a learning opportunity for him and helped him secure a job in one of the country's top construction companies.
Compared to older people, youngsters are both physically and mentally healthy and energetic. They have unwavering determination and the willpower to change the world. As they do not have a family to support, they will be the sole victims of any forthcoming loss. With older people who have many dependants financially relying on them, collateral damage to the family is inevitable. Partaking adventurous risks at old age, therefore, is perilous.
In conclusion, youngsters should be more receptive to taking risks as an outcome in their favor can change their lives, and one against them will provide an impetus to strive harder to achieve their goals.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, still, therefore, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1494.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 299.0 407.700716846 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99665551839 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73612937472 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.602006688963 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 464.4 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.6273754984 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.6 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9333333333 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.13333333333 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.268475342538 0.236089414692 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0863531985179 0.076458572812 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.126242221 0.0737576698707 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17700294726 0.150856017488 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.135990934745 0.0645574589148 211% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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