How do televisions influence people’s behavior? Use reasons and examples to support your answer.
By and large, it is established beyond doubt that with the advent of technology and advancement in the globe, the world is not similar to what it was half a century ago. There are many contributing factors that play significant roles in reshaping or deteriorating societies. In this regard, television is considered a hot topic because of all the controversial debates. Where some people see only the positive impacts of it on societies, others take issues with them. As for this writer’s opinion, I contemplate that there are both positive and negative influences that television has left in our community. In what follows, I will delve into the most crucial reasons to substantiate my viewpoint.
The compelling advantages to elucidate my standpoint are associated following notions that it is a great source of information, entertainment, and family bondings. To be more specific, it was arduous a decade ago to raise our voice against all corruption and injustice in our society, but media coverage has provided us with the opportunity that no crime could be kept hidden. Not only it provides recreation, relaxation, and enjoyment for all ages of people, but it also strengthens the relationships between family members. By way of illustration, For the last two years, my family has fixed an hour of watching television every day, after dinner. I and my husband came back from work exhausted, television provides us the chance to relax and vent out our stress. Now we have the opportunity to have a light conversation on some movie, or on any other hot news circulating on TV. It was not like that five years ago. After work, everyone in my family went to their rooms or engaged themselves in cell phones, but television makes our time more conversational. It is crystal clear to see the positive impacts of television in my home.
The second rationale is rooted in the fact that there are certain aspects that clearly indicate that television has affected our society adversely. It is worth mentioning that television is far from real life, but unfortunately, it becomes the real picture of society. In other words, youngsters imitate all the actions and indulge themselves into activities that could have catastrophic effects. Not to mention all those villain figures and imitation of the lifestyles of others which are disfiguring our community. This could result in an increase in crime ratio as limitless desires could not be fulfilled and competition could not be win over. Moreover, children spend countless hours watching their shows that drag them away from getting an education. Not only it affect their studies, but certain medical ailments associated with prolonged exposure to screen resulted too. For instance, autism, hyperactivity, and insomnia are just some of them.
By perusing the above paragraphs, one can infer that television has influenced our lives significantly. For the sake of brevity, a couple of points are worth reiterating; the positive influences are that it makes the public more aware and brings them together, the negative influences are devastating for children and young generations. As for the writer’s advice, I vehemently urge people to get the advantage of this necessity intelligently, watch it for relaxation and informational purposes in a limited amount only.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'affects'?
Suggestion: affects
...from getting an education. Not only it affect their studies, but certain medical ailm...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, second, so, then, as for, for instance, by and large, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2790.0 1977.66487455 141% => OK
No of words: 537.0 407.700716846 132% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19553072626 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81386128306 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.027573327 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 290.0 212.727598566 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540037243948 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 897.3 618.680645161 145% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.86738351254 482% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.8366257535 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.307692308 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6538461538 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.57692307692 5.45110844103 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.85842293907 311% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0906944525349 0.236089414692 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0254351601899 0.076458572812 33% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0288042183322 0.0737576698707 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0628093692204 0.150856017488 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0305741109138 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 149.0 86.8835125448 171% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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