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Independence

When baby eagles learn to fly and hunt, they will leave their parents and live a life alone. This is a natural law, but it has a prerequisite: the baby eagle has learned to fly and hunt and can survive harsh conditions. Teenagers are the same. When teenagers have the essentials they need to survive, they can leave their parents and live alone. But before that, what the teen needs to do is to estimate his or her own ability and the conditions.

But when most teenagers face the choice, they have not prepared for independence. They just have a thirst for freedom. What they don’t know is the other side of freedom: Laundry, cooking, cleaning, having a steady income, paying for water and electricity, gas repairs, dealing with the neighborhood, maintaining health and a host of other chores that consume a lot of time and energy. In this case, if the teen wants to leave his or her parents, he or she will only feel the difference between the heavenly imagination and the harsh truth. In this case, imagination and truth will have a big difference. So, when choosing independent life, teens should correctly estimate their abilities.

Another thing that a teen needs to think about is the living environment of modern society. Twenty years ago, the economy was on an upward trend, jobs were easy to find, rents were cheap, and the threshold for independent living was actually not that high. But now it is the twenty- first century, the world's economy is beginning to stop changing, the unemployment rate of young people in all countries is at a relatively high level, real estate has experienced several rounds of soaring, the price of rent has also gone up. Before, a person could afford an independent apartment, but now the same amount of money can only be used to rent a living room. In other words, the conditions of independence are now much harsher than before, and it is foreseeable that the world economy may be worse in the next decade.

If a teen has correctly calculated the climate he or she is in; clearly knows the environment that may become harsh, and the abilities of him or her, but still wants independence, then he or she should soar bravely like an eagle. Vice versa, it might be a better choice to stay with his or her parents, and prepare more for the day of independence.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 303, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'worlds'' or 'world's'?
Suggestion: worlds'; world's
...ow it is the twenty- first century, the worlds economy is beginning to stop changing, ...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, may, so, still, then, another thing, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 28.0 13.8261648746 203% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1907.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 407.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6855036855 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60148181288 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540540540541 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 593.1 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 10.0 1.86738351254 536% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.2434820295 48.9658058833 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.944444444 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6111111111 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.61111111111 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.116862721594 0.236089414692 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0391985600806 0.076458572812 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0745218721846 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0611492455813 0.150856017488 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0740408467543 0.0645574589148 115% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.22 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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