Nowadays, children rely too much on the technology, like computers, smartphone,
video games for fun and entertainment; playing simpler toys or playing outside with
friends would be better for the children's development.
Increasingly developed technology offers a growing number of approaches for fun and entertainment to children, such as computer and smartphone. It gradually generates some problems and some people suggest playing outside of simpler toys is better. I agree with this perspective.
Admittedly, it is true that highly developed technology help children learn more about the world. It is the exact time to draw on something novel at the young age. They can know what is happening in daily life through the news on the internet; they can experience diversity visual shock when get into video game worlds; they can understand exotic culture during enjoying movies without paying for tickets. These kinds of advantages will not appear if children just play simpler toys or spend time with friends. To be honest, the most convenient way for children to expand their mind and realize the constantly changing world is using the technology. Electronic products come in handy in developing children’s field of views to some extent.
However, as I mentioned, children are supposed to utilize the technology moderately instead of relying too much on it. The most serious problem is that technology damage children’s health severely than playing toys or with friends outside. Computer and smartphone radiation are detrimental to children’s vision. Staring at a screen for a long time does harm to eyesight and not only that, it causes a sharp decrease in physical activity. When children are addicted deeply into technology, there is no doubt that their physical quality will get worse and worse. On the contrary, if they are willing to play outside with friends or play toys, there is no need to worry about their health since they naturally move bodies and keep fit through playing.
Furthermore, playing outside with friends is beneficial for children to improve communication skills. At the age of cooperation, people are aware of the importance about teamwork and getting along with other friends is a good opportunity for children to acquire communication capacity. Take me for example, I prefer to have fun with my friends rather than playing computer game alone. This habit extremely helped me foster extroverted character and I became the person who tends to work where there are lots of interactions with others. If I still depend on technology, I will miss numerous beautiful sceneries and plenty of memory with my friends. It is a waste of time spending too much time on technology to touch the outside word because children will grow up and finally meet a variety of people whether in common or not. That is why I believe that playing outside with friends would be better for the children's development in the future.
To put it in a nutshell, although technology proves multiple and unique joy to children, it is more important for them to play outside with friends or simper toys, which keeps them heathy and develops more skills. Do not rely on technology too much and attempt to find the beauty around the real world.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, furthermore, however, if, so, still, for example, no doubt, such as, it is true, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 77.0 52.1666666667 148% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2539.0 1977.66487455 128% => OK
No of words: 500.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.078 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72870804502 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72841272538 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 268.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 770.4 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.210797229 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.791666667 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8333333333 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.375 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.548995889943 0.236089414692 233% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.149138210433 0.076458572812 195% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107753140343 0.0737576698707 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.311640276887 0.150856017488 207% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0628570566681 0.0645574589148 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.