In order to be successful, one has to make enemies. Do you agree or disagree?
Success is one of those issues which has been intellectual nourishment feeding human’s sense of satisfaction since time immemorial. In this regard, individuals make strenuous efforts so as to fulfill their dreams, cultivating a sense of accomplishment. Some people believe that it is inevitable to make enemies in the paths of reaching success. However, some other stands at the other extreme, holding the view that one has to make friends and companionships to be successful. Yet to the best of my knowledge, I side with those people believing the latter idea. The following paragraphs lend credence to this view.
First and foremost, what provokes people to avoid making enemies in the paths of success is that this avenue does not pave the way toward surmounting hurdles and problems existed in their way. To be more specific, stupendous achievements would be possible provided that people broaden their relationships with others. It has been acknowledged that people believing in fierce competition with others to achieve their goals cannot be successful as a whole, leading them to damage their concrete relations to the extent that reach their goals. In the meantime, this trend is more prevalent in the undeveloped, backward nation, which people disregard manifold ethical issues to reach their targets anyway. With this in mind, various attention, such as the educational system, television propaganda, and so forth, should be paid on the adverse effects of making enemies in the way of achieving success.
What is more, making enemies toward attaining goals will be conducive to other aggressive behaviors such as not being kind and benevolent with our families. With the pace of life speeding up, people should be careful about their behaviors, cultivating them to simultaneously reach their goals and maintain their families’ mutual relationship. Many people lead a hectic life derived from living in metropolitan cities, and they should learn how to be benign with other people. In fact, negatively involving with others gives people composure when acting violently, a trigger for their aggressive behavior. Also, the sustained growth of a country rests on its benevolent, hardworking people; the absence of which will contribute to the chaotic, haphazard, and backward society. In this respect, no until people’s viewpoints about not making enemies toward reaching the apex of success gets improved can communities make progress.
In the final analysis, I have to reiterate my standpoint that people should not make enemies be successful. This is because individuals need others to help them address their problems, and making enemies will lead to permanently aggressive behavior.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 189, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...ard, individuals make strenuous efforts so as to fulfill their dreams, cultivating a sen...
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Line 3, column 798, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
... and backward society. In this respect, no until people's viewpoints about no...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, anyway, but, first, however, if, so, as to, in fact, such as, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2292.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 422.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.43127962085 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93703913362 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53317535545 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 690.3 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.0767135844 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.631578947 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2105263158 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.21052631579 5.45110844103 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135743478618 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0530434677289 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0515382499234 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10505689264 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.025127706796 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 11.7677419355 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.21 10.9000537634 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.37 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 86.8835125448 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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