Parents should allow children to make their own choices rather than determine their children’s future for them.
As the pressure of people’s lives is becoming more and more immense, parents tend to be mindful of their children’s future and some even determine their children’s future for them. The parents argue that this is helpful for their children. In my view, parents should allow children to make their own choices.
First, each person has his own idea about himself and so do children. The one who knows us better than anyone in the world are ourselves. Much as the parents understand their children, after all they are not their children and they do not know what their children exactly think. Therefore, children could make choices which are most suitable for them instead of their parents. Furthermore, once the choice has been made, it is not feasible to correct it sometimes. So, allowing children to make the choices which are most appropriate for them is of paramount importance. For instance, I have a cousin, he has a gift in physics and he thinks it couldn’t be better for him to study physics in the university. Nonetheless, his parents thought that he should study economics and forced him for he could find jobs with higher salaries. As a result, he did not so well as his parents thought and his parents regretted their decision as well. None of this would happen if his parents allow him to make his own choice.
Second, since children have their own mind, they may be rebellious when compelling them to conform their parents’ choices towards their future. Since they have the rebellious psychology, they probably not do what their parents want them to do, they may do what against to their parents even they do not have this idea originally just for the sake of rebelling instead and this is especially harmful to children’s development. In addition, when they were forced to do something that does not follow his heart, even though they complied reluctantly at that time, they might not conform permanently. Moreover, the rebellious psychology has a detrimental influence on the relationship between children and parents as it can disintegrate children’s affection towards their parents gradually which may result something vicious.
In conclusion, everyone deserves the right to determine his future on his own and so do children. They need to be allowed to make choices by their inclinations freely rather than being determined by their parents. Finally, parents can never be their children, thus allowing children themselves, who know them best, to make choices could be better.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, furthermore, if, may, moreover, nonetheless, second, so, therefore, thus, well, after all, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 70.0 43.0788530466 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2102.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 416.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05288461538 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70142686382 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.461538461538 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 610.2 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.9138623241 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.1 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.6 5.45110844103 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.604021189321 0.236089414692 256% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.221561355058 0.076458572812 290% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.142537686095 0.0737576698707 193% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.455950074256 0.150856017488 302% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.128640895202 0.0645574589148 199% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.36 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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