People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries.
By and large, everyone has their own selecting approach about the place that they want to travel. Most people contend that traveling to foreign countries is most enjoyable and beneficial than traveling in their own country. They assert that it provides people with not only quite a lot pleasure, but also a vast range of selection; hewever, My viewpoit is in opposite way. In the following, I will aptly eleborate on my perspective using three substantial and compelling reasons.
First of all, no one can deny the significant impact of tourism on the economic condition of a specific countary. It is a well-known fact that, if more people travel to the countary, they will bring a lot of money with them to spend it in the country; this fact provide us a paramount insight which is the people of the country have responsibility to recognize their own country, and it will not happen unless the people travel in thire own country in order to acquaire a adequate knowledge. this knowledge will help people to encourage other nations to travel to their countary. Besides, traviling in our omn countary benefits the people to know more about their cultural and ethnic diversity.
Another indisputable cause that convinces me to hold this idea is that traviling in our contry is prefarable beacuse in some emergency situation you can overcome an unintended problem more faster than a someone from another country with different language. I, for example, have had a similar situation during my last trip. Last month, I along with my family decided to travel to one of the famous cities in our country, Tabriz; before our entrance into city, a catastrophic earthquake just had happend, and all the city was in chataic situation. Unfortunetly, we could not find any opened hotel in the whole city. I suddenly remembered that I had a close friend in that city; I called him, and he provided us with some meal to eat, and a room to stay at night. Althogh at the end of the trip none of us felt happy, we were grateful that my friend helped us. This example demostates that in some situation you can easily overcome to get a solution when some accidental problems find us.
Finally, my last point regarding this issue which legitimizes my standpoint is that in some underdeveloped countries with precarious economical condition, , like my country, if people travel in their own coiunty, it will afford the country with a considerable money rotation; Not only will it enhance the economic situation, but also it will increase the happiness level of the society. The money that people spend in their own country will pass a economic cycle and will find them. In the other words, by improving the economic condition of the society, all the people will experience better and thriving lives.
Taking all the aforementioned reasons, and examples into account, I conclude that because traviling in our own countary has considerable advantages of helping the economic condition of society, getting familiar with our cultural, and asking help from people in the emergency situation will benefit everyone. I highly recommend the reported reasons be taken as additional information to be consider by people who value the prosperity of their own country.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 471, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... thire own country in order to acquaire a adequate knowledge. this knowledge will...
^
Line 3, column 471, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[4]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'adequate knowledge'.
Suggestion: adequate knowledge
... thire own country in order to acquaire a adequate knowledge. this knowledge will help people to enc...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 493, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...order to acquaire a adequate knowledge. this knowledge will help people to encourage...
^^^^
Line 5, column 185, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'faster' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: faster
... you can overcome an unintended problem more faster than a someone from another country wit...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 202, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'a' or 'someone'?
Suggestion: a; someone
... an unintended problem more faster than a someone from another country with different lan...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 459, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
..., Tabriz; before our entrance into city, a catastrophic earthquake just had happe...
^^
Line 7, column 155, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...es with precarious economical condition, , like my country, if people travel in th...
^^
Line 7, column 447, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...le spend in their own country will pass a economic cycle and will find them. In t...
^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, first, if, regarding, so, well, for example, by and large, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 71.0 43.0788530466 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 77.0 52.1666666667 148% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2700.0 1977.66487455 137% => OK
No of words: 543.0 407.700716846 133% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97237569061 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82725184711 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75358995682 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 273.0 212.727598566 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502762430939 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 864.0 618.680645161 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 94.6834198791 48.9658058833 193% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.0 100.406767564 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.15 20.6045352989 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.321707983309 0.236089414692 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.093974785771 0.076458572812 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104098760496 0.0737576698707 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189124218758 0.150856017488 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0848087137148 0.0645574589148 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 142.0 86.8835125448 163% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.