Should government spend money on public parks for everyone or build a sport field for students
That government’s financial policies highly affect people’s lives is an axiom. One of the most perceivable influences of this policy could be seen in the field of playing sports and recreation . A question, which is a matter of debate, a controversial one, is whether government should invest more money in construction public parks or it should build a sport field for students. Although it is a little hard to reach a consensus on this issue, I am, to a great extent, on the belief that the benefits of building public in lieu of sport fields for students are too enormous to fathom . The following reasons would elaborate more on the thesis.
To commence, one of the compelling reasons that justifies the thesis is that public parks can be used by the whole society. To put in in general words, people of all age ranges can recreate by going to public parks, whereas sport fields have been constructed to be used only by students. Simply stated, having allocate budget to build public parks, the whole society can benefit from it including teenagers, students and adults. Needless to say that the government should organize its limited budget in a way through which the majority of the society can gain benefit from it. It is all transparent that students requires sport fields to do some exercise, but these public parks can be used instead of sport fields in order to do sports such as running. Informed of the fact that public parks could be used for assorted purposes like exercising and disporting, the government should allot most of it budget to construct public parks. To shed more light on the issue, according to the result of a study posted in Time Magazine, the need for recreation among people in a society is far greater than the need for exercising among students.
Alongside with the first reason elaborated above, the effects of the public park on the health of the society are another point which requires meticulous attention. Simply stated, to be healthy mentally and physically, people should go to some beautiful places with abundant trees and colorful flowers. Broadly speaking, if the government has a keen eye on the needs of the society, it should put emphasis on the ways to obviate them. To delineate, the cost of the most of the recreational facilities is exorbitant; accordingly there should be some affordable places for the whole society in which they can have fun and excitement. In addition, public parks offer numerous advantages for students as they can do some exercises in them or recreate with their families and friends. However, what I mentioned above might not be overgeneralized to all contexts. In some countries which had national jungles with some facilities the need for building sport fields is much higher than public parks. Nevertheless, they are more of an exception rather than a general rule.
Drawing upon the reasons, although there are always some exceptions which are excluded from the general rule, I do agree that the government should invest more money in building public parks. To recapitulate the reasons, not only does the whole society including all age ranges benefit from it, but also it provides an affordable recreational facility which assists the society to be healthy both mentally and physically.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, however, if, nevertheless, so, whereas, broadly speaking, in addition, in general, such as, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 9.8082437276 224% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 80.0 52.1666666667 153% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2736.0 1977.66487455 138% => OK
No of words: 549.0 407.700716846 135% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98360655738 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84053189512 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73834005616 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.451730418944 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 839.7 618.680645161 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.6035059186 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.363636364 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9545454545 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.36363636364 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.379739709392 0.236089414692 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116206126116 0.076458572812 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106617436178 0.0737576698707 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.257609159017 0.150856017488 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10943707994 0.0645574589148 170% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 86.8835125448 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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