Should government spend money on public parks for everyone or build a sport field for students
The government financial investigations on sport have a big influence on healthiness of people by assorted factors is a master key. Happiness and healthiness are two factors that dramatically influence society future development. A question, which is a matter of debate, a polemical one, government should investigate on public parks for everyone or build a sport field just for students. Although it is a little hard to reach a consensus on this issue, I am great extent on the belief that construction a sport field has more profound effect on the health of society and government should spend more money on this issue. The following reasons would be elaborate on this thesis.
To commence, one of the compelling reason that justifies the thesis is that the happiness and healthiness are affect the humans; spatially on children, which they are in growing ages. To put it in general, the sport guarantee the future of children for better life with happiness and people with health can used of their mind to develop the country. Simply state, the sport field provides an appropriate atmosphere for children to concentrate on their sport activities to be useful for their country. We cannot find this remarkable property in public parks or other public areas. They could not prepare all type of sport for people and the sports in these places are limit. Going into depth, more children doing sport that they like it which the sport fields prepare this characteristic. For example in sport fields, we can find the variety range of sport like football, handball, soccer etc. that help to children to choose their lovely sports. To shed more light on this issue, according to the results that revealed by Elsevier journal, more than 60% of children do not like the sports that are exist in public parks.
Alongside with the first reason elaborated in above, in the fields sport, teachers in the sport field could be founded the talented children, which requires meticulous attention. Broadly, speaking, the majority of sport heroes have a specific talent in the sport in their childhood. To delineate, coaches in field sports find the enthusiastic children and learn them to gain many honor for their country. This achievement is a big gain for government that they know their investigation has good results. However, What I mentioned above might not be over generalize to all context, some people like’s public parks. They think that those places have fresh air, tree and other natural things and all people can use of these places. Nevertheless, they are more of an exception rather than a general rule.
Drawing to upon reasons, although there are always some exceptions, which are excluded from the general rule, I do agree that constructing the sport field have more effect on healthiness of people. To recapitulate the reasons, children, which they are the future constructor of society, need to have big consideration.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, nevertheless, so, thus, for example, in general
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2451.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 484.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06404958678 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69041575982 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72730637971 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.473140495868 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 735.3 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.5745509856 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.565217391 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0434782609 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.91304347826 5.45110844103 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.339960413865 0.236089414692 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0986694648047 0.076458572812 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111650353167 0.0737576698707 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208276597391 0.150856017488 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.116215730655 0.0645574589148 180% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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