Should government spend money on public parks for everyone or build a sport field for students
That in today's world, the governments have big influence on healthiness of people by assorted factors is a master key. When people are in childhood, they need sport to construct and shape their body. This issue is a main factor in their future healthiness. A question, which is a matter of debate, a polemical one, construction of Public Park is important or builds a sport field. Although it is a little hard to reach a consensus on this issue, I am great extent on the belief that construction a sport felid has more profound effect on the health of children. The following reasons would be elaborate on this thesis.
To commence, one of the compelling reason that justifies the thesis is that the healthiness affected all life spatially on children, which they are in growing ages. To put it in general, the sport guarantee the future of children for better life with happiness. Simply state, the sport field provides an appropriate atmosphere for children to concentrate on their sport activities. We cannot find this remarkable property in parks or other public areas. Going into depth, more children doing sport that they like it which the sport fields prepare this characteristic. For example in sport fields, we can find the variety range of sport like football, handball, soccer etc. that help to children to choose their lovely sports. To shed more light on this issue, according to the results that revealed by Elsevier journal, which children selected proper sport, they could be successful in their future life.
Alongside with the first reason elaborated in above, in the fields sport, the talented children could be founded which requires meticulous attention. Broadly speaking, everyone has a talent in the specific sport, which should be detect, and proposed for future. To delineate, coaches in field sports find the enthusiastic children and learn them to gain many honor for their country. This achievement is a big gain for government that they know their investigation has good results. However, What I mentioned above might not be over generalize to all context, some people like’s public parks. They think that those places have fresh air, tree and other natural things. Nevertheless, they do not sport in the park and this is the bad consequence.
Drawing to upon reasons, although there are always some exceptions, which are excluded from the general rule, I do agree that constructing the sport field have more effect on healthiness of people, as result, government should concentrate on this issue.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, nevertheless, so, thus, broadly speaking, for example, in fact, in general
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2122.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 417.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08872901679 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72709638128 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532374100719 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 622.8 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.2805937511 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.4545454545 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9545454545 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.27272727273 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270790932183 0.236089414692 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0851041654029 0.076458572812 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0726278308725 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170819005863 0.150856017488 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0573618031111 0.0645574589148 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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