Some people suggest that using a cleaner energy to protect the environment is better but some people say the traditional energy sources such as coal and oil is less expensive what is your suggestion

Some people hold the belief that traditional energy sources such as coal or oil are cheaper than cleaner energy sources, so they believe that traditional energy sources are more reliable and useful. However, I think we should use cleaner energy sources to protect the environment. I will elaborate on my discussion for three reasons.

First of all, cleaner energy can improve social efficiency wholly because using cleaner energy can improve the quality of the environment and reduce pollution. For factories with a lot of workers, a better environment can bring better working conditions, so the output of the factories can be enhanced. In many developing countries, a limited environment - caused by traditional energy sources - usually decreases the motivation of the workers. Both the quality and quantity of the products are restricted by the upset manufacturers. It is obvious that if cleaner energy is used by these countries, their environment will eventually better and improve the whole social efficiency.

Secondly, cleaner energy can be the catalyst for technological improvement. When people tag into the new cleaner energy, they will embrace the new technology to have a better understanding of the cleaner energy. For instance, wind farms need a lot of scientists to struggle with the material to produce a durable generator of electricity, which can clearly improve the level of the technology. In contrast, if people just focus on the traditional energy sources, they will somewhat restrain the relative technology's enhancement, since they just notice how to use the energy sources instead of how to develop new methods to find new energy sources. In this fast-changing world, the lack of new technology is so bad for a country or a company.
Finally, some people will keep the opinion that traditional energy sources are cheaper to use and can bring the possibility to the economic benefit. Nevertheless, I want to remind them that traditional energy sources are not reusable and cannot be recycled. In the use of oil or coal, we will find that the number of them is going down so quickly, and eventually, the number will go to zero. In this turn, the price of the traditional will be higher due to the lack of them.

In conclusion, energy use is crossing a lot of fields around the world, so it is a complicated question for many people to bother with it. However I still believe that in the 21st-century world, we need to focus more on new cleaner energy, it is beneficial for both the environment and for ourselves.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, still, for instance, i think, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2125.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 420.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05952380952 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91140819917 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.45 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 678.6 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.2552449126 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.842105263 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1052631579 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.57894736842 5.45110844103 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.348331662143 0.236089414692 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114428952218 0.076458572812 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101881918816 0.0737576698707 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.216575784156 0.150856017488 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0995013270266 0.0645574589148 154% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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