At some universities, students take part in making decisions about the issues that affect daily life of everyone on campus, such as how many hours that the libraries should be open each day or what kinds of food should be served in the cafeteria. But at some universities, experts are hired to make this decisions, students almost never involved. Which approach do you prefer and why?
Since the dawn of humanity, having a social life has considered dramatically. Some people are of the opinion that thanks to the technological breakthroughs in every section of science, having enormous experts, each decision should be taken by a person who has adequate information, while I personally subscribe to the view that students should be involved in communities. This practice aids them in cooperate with each other on a large scale, and on a small scale, foster their skills. In the following paragraphs, My reasons will be elaborated on in more detail.
To begin with, I cannot deny the fact that nowadays, education is on the policy that each person is nurtured to be a specialist in one field of study; however, interaction plays a crucial rule in our social life, and university is the place which we expect to learn those interactions such as cooperating, group working, and showing resilience, which needs meticulous attention. To delve more into it, newcomers who attend a variety of clubs or gropes, for instance, are more capable of making new friends, then possess the chance to be successful in social life. Moreover, daily life, which is directly dependent on the life of students, must be on the hand of the residents who live there. it means that should people, even experts who do not have enough experience and knowledge about life on campus, take a serious decision, it might have disadvantages, lacking information about current demands and requires. For example, increasing the library hours should be decided by dormitory residents rather than others because they cannot study in the dormitory until midnight at the end of the semesters, while other students want to sleep early.
Last but not least, people who learn to interact with each other and make the best decision, improve their skills too. As a matter of fact, skills ranging from social to individual can be fostered during tough situations. Apart from that, university should indicate to students that they are precious and valuable, whom their beliefs and thoughts have impacts on perspectives. although students, for example, may decide to shortage hours of history classes, in contrast, university policies are opposed to reducing the hours, or they might choose to add fast foods and junk foods to cafeteria menu, which are obstacles for their healths, they can learn from the consequences and making reasonable decisions in the future. Indeed, conversation or conflicts can assist students in expressing their ideas, persisting in those that are goods, and convincing others to concur plans and take the responsibilities of them. Just as they learn to improve their skills, so do they face the results of their decisions and interact with its merits and demerits.
Drawing upon the reasons that I mentioned above, although there are several exceptions which are excluded from general rules, I believe that involving students to decisions that are generally related to their life have salient advantages. Not only can they learn to cooperate, resulting to meet new people, but also they can improve their skills such as social behaviors; in addition, they would take more responsibilities of their ideas, hence be mature.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, while, apart from, for example, for instance, in addition, in contrast, such as, as a matter of fact, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2704.0 1977.66487455 137% => OK
No of words: 523.0 407.700716846 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17017208413 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78217453174 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78127564716 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 280.0 212.727598566 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535372848948 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 832.5 618.680645161 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 86.8073474479 48.9658058833 177% => OK
Chars per sentence: 159.058823529 100.406767564 158% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.7647058824 20.6045352989 149% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0588235294 5.45110844103 185% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229364517215 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0706183479257 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0455052592999 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142148120436 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0573518336284 0.0645574589148 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.3 11.7677419355 156% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 58.1214874552 71% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.3 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.08 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 131.0 86.8835125448 151% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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