Students who are given grades work harder than those who are not. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
It can't be denied that humans always put their best into a project that has a reward. Consequently, an organization with a good system of monitoring workers cannot lack industrious members. Students are not exceptions to this ideology. In my opinion, I believe students who are awarded in the form of grades work more assiduously than those who are not. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will discuss in the following essay.
To begin with, a good grade can excite a student and even encourage him or her to do better. A bad grade can equally show a student his current level of knowledge, which can stimulate the student to improve and work harder. For instance, my personal experience is a compelling illustration of this. Two years ago, I got ten percent on a chemistry exam at Obafemi Awolowo University. I realized I still needed to read some topics to understand and pass the subject. I burnt candles, read, and studied hard to rewrite the exam. I finally got a ninety-percent grade in the course. I was very excited, and this motivated me to prepare for other courses with all my strength. If I hadn't been scored, I wouldn't have known my strength in the subject. I would only know the superficial aspects of the course, which requires miniature energy.
Furthermore, allocating grades to students can incite harmless competition among them. This makes these students study hard to win the first position, especially if the winner has been designated to be given a scholarship. For example, ten years ago, I became addicted to reading books because I wanted to win a scholarship. This scholarship was intended to be awarded to the student who wins the first position. I had sleepless nights, skipped meals, and even ignored playing around as a little child so as to study well for the competition. My efforts were rewarded when I won both the competition and the scholarship.I learned to study easily during the process, and the skill helped me throughout my undergraduate period. If there wasn't anything like first position or grade, I wouldn't have had the opportunity to compete with anyone, and also enjoy the benefits that accompanied the process.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that students that are graded work harder than those that are not. This is due to the excitement and competition that comes with grading students, which always motivates them to work harder.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, finally, first, furthermore, if, so, still, well, as to, for example, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1997.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 407.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90663390663 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84309478308 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574938574939 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 621.9 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.2819324139 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.7727272727 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.04545454545 5.45110844103 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194180937785 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0526363428901 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0819116427374 0.0737576698707 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142231027622 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0618487108039 0.0645574589148 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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