TPO 51
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Movies and television are big parts of our lives nowadays. People of all age have their favorite movies and tv shows. they are affecting their audience in various ways, especially young ones, and unfortunately mostly in a bad way.
First of all, violence became very common on both movies and television. People in these use different kinds of weapons, different kinds of methods to kill each other. They do this without emotions, without mercy. On screen, murdering looks very easy; no hesitations, no police around, everyone has guns. All of these can motivate young people towards using violence to solve their problems.
Secondly, sexuality is being presented without intimacy or privacy. As they learn from the movies, young people don't pay attention to the emotional part of it. Relations which should stay between the couples only, being exposed to everyone, thus bringing down all the moral rules of the society.
Thirdly, many protagonists and antagonists drink, smoke, and use illicit drugs. Even though their avoidance on screen wouldn't look realistic, we cannot deny the attraction they are causing among young people. Lots of them want to look like these "cool" people on movies, or merely out of curiosity they are trying many kinds of unhealthy products, and intoxicating themselves.
As conclusion, television and movies have more negative effects than positive effects on younger individuals, and we should treat them with caution.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, look, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, thus, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 11.0286738351 9% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 43.0788530466 46% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1240.0 1977.66487455 63% => OK
No of words: 231.0 407.700716846 57% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.36796536797 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89854898053 4.48103885553 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67778225289 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 212.727598566 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.662337662338 0.524837075471 126% => OK
syllable_count: 374.4 618.680645161 61% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.9767826367 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.6666666667 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.4 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.86666666667 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18921188156 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0575695840779 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0795659990132 0.0737576698707 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119405667499 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.110665524948 0.0645574589148 171% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.57 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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