Which one of the following values is the most important to share with a young child (5-10 years old)?
1. being helpful
2. being honest
3. being well organized
Commonly, parents and schools expect children to establish correct concepts of morality so that they can be socially healthy people. In my opinion, among various values, being well organized is most important for young children. I feel this way for several reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
For starters, well-organized people can embrace a more promising future than those who never make plans. They obtain the capability to divide a challenging task into smaller, easier ones and enforce the plan meticulously. Therefore, they are more likely to solve untractable problems and obtain achievement. The experience of my employer, Julie, is a compelling model of that. As a partner of an elite law firm, she makes a detailed schedule every day, which includes when to meet clients, when to check the product of workers, when to submit legal documents, and when to attend meetings with some officers. Making a schedule benefits her greatly in that she can make use of office hours efficiently and complete more merging and acquisition projects than her competitors. As a result, she enjoys a splendid reputation among legal professionals and was promoted to chief financial officer of a tech giant last month. This example shows that well-organized people generally have superior overall quality owing to their self-control. If she had organized her tasks randomly, she would not have enhanced her professional skills shortly after entering the law firm.
Besides, it is necessary to cultivate the habit of organizing things clearly from early ages. If we tell a high school student to be well-organized, he will likely neglect the advice or have no idea about where to start. As research conducted by a famous institution reveals, children who are educated to be well-organized before 10 years old tend to receive better grades in the college entrance exam and have better performance at work when they grow up. Understandably, it is challenging to change a habit of an adult because he has been used to behave in the previous way.
Admittedly, other personalities like honesty and helpfulness also play a significant role in being a healthy person socially and mentally. However, people can be motivated to be helpful when they has grown to adults. For example, the government could promulgate acts to offer rewards for those who help strangers in emergency. In contrast, if people lack the opportunity to become well-organized, they will remain careless for the rest of their lives.
Based on the reasons above, I believe being well-organized is the most important value to share with children because being well-organized is a solid competitive edge when facing with fierce competition. Also, it is unfavorable to miss the precious chance to teach people this quality in childhood.
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...teach people this quality in childhood.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, however, if, so, therefore, well, for example, i feel, in contrast, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2366.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 453.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2229580574 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61343653406 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98701845278 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 277.0 212.727598566 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.611479028698 0.524837075471 117% => OK
syllable_count: 744.3 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.8029893114 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.545454545 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5909090909 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.95454545455 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.316409424597 0.236089414692 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.078559436712 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103582177582 0.0737576698707 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.194175656175 0.150856017488 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0912273530702 0.0645574589148 141% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 86.8835125448 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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