Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole.
Young people are important to the community because they are workforce of the country. However, it has been argued that the young does not have a great impact on the future of community, and I firmly agree with this point of view.
First of all, economic concerns have distracted the young from important societal and political matters, Although these matters play a significant role in making decisions about the future of community. Nowadays harsh economic condition has led youngsters to strive for taking a job to fulfil their financial requirements; Therefore, they cannot focus on vital issues about future of country. For instance, When I received an admission for undergraduate studies at University of Tehran, I decided to become independent from my family. Therefore, I took a part-time job that provided me with minimum income needed for subsistence. I succeeded to overcome my financial challenges without asking any financial aid from my family; nevertheless, my job would deplete all my energy so that I couldn't even think about politics or matters of important concern for society. As a result, I have not any political and societal insights and am unable to contribute to the future of country.
Furthermore, development of technology provided the young generation with a vast amount of entertainments and new devices for amusement so the young prefer to spend time for hobbies and having fun rather than caring about important affairs of community. For example, my cousin who have 20 years old, does not care about politics and government issues. He even didn't participate in presidential election because entertainment and recreational activities are his priorities. My cousin dedicates a lot of time to playing video games and using social media and that prevents him from thinking about politics. Consequently, a large variety of pastimes in the modern world distract youth from contributing to the crucial decisions associated with the future of community.
It is fair to conclude that the young people cannot not make any significant effect on the future of country. This is because some of the young have to concentrate on taking a job and making money to be able to cope with harsh economic condition and the remainder are overwhelmed with entertaining activities.
- In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure successful future 70
- When teachers assign projects on which students must work together the students learn much more effectively than when they are asked to work alone on projects 73
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 76
- Because the world is changing so quickly people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past 81
- Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole 80
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...b would deplete all my energy so that I couldnt even think about politics or matters of...
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Line 6, column 282, Rule ID: HAVE_CD_YEARS[1]
Message: This phrase is used with 'be': 'be 20 years old'.
Suggestion: be 20 years old
...f community. For example, my cousin who have 20 years old, does not care about politics and gover...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...politics and government issues. He even didnt participate in presidential election be...
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Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
... the future of country. This is because some of the young have to concentrate on taking a j...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, nevertheless, so, therefore, for example, for instance, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1933.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 369.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23848238482 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96864883973 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.542005420054 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 623.7 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.94265232975 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.8878505474 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.866666667 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.86666666667 5.45110844103 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181520727691 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0721755645409 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0640299893414 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138027014062 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0430644100912 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 58.1214874552 67% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.32 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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