Desertification in earth
In this set of materials the writer and the lecturer are discussing occurence of deserts in the earth. They widely contrast each other. The lecturer points out that a human produced way of dessert formation called disertification whereas the author claims that desert is formed with environmental conditions. The lecturer invalidates the writers points with following details and examples.
First unlike the writer the lecturer mentions the presence of a nearby desert is not necessarily related to desertification. Areas far from natural deserts can quickly fall prey to the results of poor management. These areas ultemetely become desert like environments.
Secondly the example of Great Plains demonstrates that results of poor farming and drought created this arid and wind blown land and thousands of people were forced from their homes.
Consequently the lecturer refutes on all the writers points in 2 aspects and demonstrates that prescence of desert is artifact.
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are discussing occurence of deserts in the earth.
are discussing the occurrence of deserts in the earth.
They widely contrast each other.
They widely contrast to each other.
that a human produced way of dessert formation
that a human produced the way of dessert formation
Sentence: The lecturer invalidates the writers points with following details and examples.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to writers and points
Sentence: In this set of materials the writer and the lecturer are discussing occurence of deserts in the earth.
Error: occurence Suggestion: occurrence
Sentence: The lecturer points out that a human produced way of dessert formation called disertification whereas the author claims that desert is formed with environmental conditions.
Error: disertification Suggestion: diversification
Sentence: These areas ultemetely become desert like environments.
Error: ultemetely Suggestion: ultimately
Sentence: Consequently the lecturer refutes on all the writers points in 2 aspects and demonstrates that prescence of desert is artifact.
Error: prescence Suggestion: presence
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Words: 149 250
Minimum 150 words wanted.
The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Don't need a conclusion.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 13 in 30
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 9 12
No. of Words: 149 250
No. of Characters: 811 1200
No. of Different Words: 99 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.5 4.2
Average Word Length: 5.407 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.882 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 69 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 49 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 31 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 19 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.667 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.674 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.444 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.388 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.645 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.05 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4