TPO 42 Integrated Writing Task

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TPO-42 - Integrated Writing Task

Each year, millions of birds get injured by trying to fly through windows. Here, three solutions have been proposed to stop this in the passage. But whether these solutions are sufficiently effective or not is investigated in the lecture. In fact all solution are considered ineffective by the lecturer.

Firstly, using one-way glass does not seem to be effective. As stated in the lecture, light reflects in one-way glass and from the other side it just resembles a mirror. The problem is that birds don't understand mirrors. Therefore, they will try to go through it when they decide to. To the contrary, it is stated in the passage that birds will assume that as a solid barrier just because they don't see inside. So, whether using on-way glass is effective or not, depends crucially on birds' understanding of a mirror.

Secondly, making colorful designs has been suggested as a solution in the context due to its difference from glass but, as considered in the lecture, colorful designs do not cover the whole surface of glass therefore the uncolored spaces are just as transparent as glass. Then, from a bird's point of view, these spaces are holes through which they can fly. This opposites the goal of making colorful designs and therefore leaves this out due its inefficiency.

Thirdly, the text considers magnetic fields as another solution. Actually use of magnetic fields for short trips contradicts the fact that birds make use of magnetic fields only when they are traveling long distances. So this solution does not seem to have much effect.

Finally, as stated in the lecture, none of the three solutions suggested in the passage are useful to stop birds from flying through glasses.

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Average: 8.5 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...at as a solid barrier just because they dont see inside. So, whether using on-way gl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, finally, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, third, thirdly, in fact

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 12.0772626932 58% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 22.412803532 89% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 30.3222958057 135% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1426.0 1373.03311258 104% => OK
No of words: 285.0 270.72406181 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00350877193 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59418104909 2.5805825403 101% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 145.348785872 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522807017544 0.540411800872 97% => OK
syllable_count: 432.0 419.366225166 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.23620309051 24% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 13.0662251656 130% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 21.2450331126 75% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 52.5458442119 49.2860985944 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.8823529412 110.228320801 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7647058824 21.698381199 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.23529411765 7.06452816374 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 4.33554083885 208% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.446370477227 0.272083759551 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126237039439 0.0996497079465 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0623984537999 0.0662205650399 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.220910511792 0.162205337803 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0771662741128 0.0443174109184 174% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 13.3589403974 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 53.8541721854 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.0289183223 76% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.42 12.2367328918 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.42419426049 93% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 63.6247240618 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.7273730684 51% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.498013245 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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