Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Incontrovertibly, over the times, the great influence of some famous persons and celebrities on people, especially younger ones, cannot be overlooked by anyone. There are so many different ideas as to whether young people are more affected by celebrities' opinions or older ones. As far as I am concerned, mostly, they are young people who are affected the most by all the statements and ideas of famous persons on the grounds of some reasons, among which, celebrities being role models to young people and wisdom of older persons are of great importance.
For one thing, because of the age of celebrities, the average of which is about thirty- years old, and so many acts that they do such as singing or modeling, they seem attractive to young people. No one can cast doubt on that such activities as singing rap songs, wearing some weird customs, and forming some groups made of fans are things that young ones like to do more than older people. Therefore, when a young person enjoys, for instance, some rap songs of a famous singer, he will take that singer as his role model in life. The more young people are attracted to celebrities, the more they will follow celebrities' habits and ideas of life. It is crystal clear that when a young person is drawn into some persons' art or actions not only will he choose that celebrity as his idol but also he will do whatever that famous person does in his life.
Another equally important reason is that so experienced and wise are older people that they are reluctant to follow some other persons' ideas, mostly the age of them is low. To illustrate my viewpoint, I would like to provide an imaginary example. Take, for example, a sixty-year-old person whose job is managing. This person has experienced so many hard situations and has passed harsh conditions in life that he will consider himself as a wise person who can teach his experiences to younger ones. However, a celebrity may be so popular, without a shadow of a doubt this old person is reluctant to take some young-famous persons' opinions as his life mottos, for he thinks that he has found the best ideas for his life which will pave the way to the zenith of his goals. Maybe had this old person not have such great experiences in his life and was naive, he would have willingly followed some celebrities' views.
All in all, to recapitulate, I believe that young persons are the ones who can be easily affected by others' opinions, especially if they are some famous ones. Young people's being inexperienced will make them a person who will follow whatever their role models tell. As a final word, we should not underestimate the influence of our young children's role models in their lives, and therefore, we should be aware of what kind of person they follow.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 175, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...t be overlooked by anyone. There are so many different ideas as to whether young people are mo...
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Line 1, column 196, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...yone. There are so many different ideas as to whether young people are more affected by celeb...
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Line 2, column 711, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
... when a young person is drawn into some persons art or actions not only will he choose ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, may, so, therefore, as for, as to, for example, for instance, kind of, such as, for one thing
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2289.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 486.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70987654321 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69525374022 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57244194012 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.448559670782 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 729.9 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.9054336044 48.9658058833 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.647058824 100.406767564 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5882352941 20.6045352989 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.23529411765 5.45110844103 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152775729098 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0666687129401 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0530152615574 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107782227841 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0408341065488 0.0645574589148 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.63 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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