Some young adults want to be independent as soon as possible. While others prefer to live with family member as long as they can.
The essay discusses about the need of young people being independant from their parents. Whether one should leave one's parents' house as soon as possible or one should stay with them for a longer period of time. While some might prefer to stay with family foe as long as possible, to learn and preserve the cultural values, learn about family history and continue the legacy others prefer to leave their parents' home at the earliest.
Adulthood comes with a lot of by products, called the need of privacy, the need of freedom Young adults does not like anyone's interference in their lives. The modern world might direct them to be independant and learn to live alone but it does not state the fact in front them. There is a right time to learn things. When young adults leave their home too soon, they are devoid of what their family has to offer. With time they lose the intimacy, the bond they share with their families.
Leaving the parents' house too soon might turn out to be difficult thing. They might think they are ready for it physically, but mentally they are not ready. A recent study done on graduate students states that many graduate students are unemployed and it will be a stress on them to manage their living expense without a decent employment. That is the time when the person requires support from his/her family.
Although staying at one's parents house for too long is a los not a good decision though, one might get too dependent on others or one might be less independent. Leaving the parents' house after one is stable in one's career and is ready mentally and physically is the better option there is.
In a nutshell, when young adults are ready for it, after they have done thorough analysis about their situation, mental and physical, that is when they are actually ready to move out and live on their own and not when the fancy and distractive world asks them to.
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Yes, I have written one's only, this happened because I copied from my local WordPad to here.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 115, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...their parents. Whether one should leave ones parents house as soon as possible or on...
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Line 1, column 196, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
... one should stay with them for a longer period of time. While some might prefer to stay with f...
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Line 7, column 21, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
... his/her family. Although staying at ones parents house for too long is a los not...
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Line 7, column 211, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...he parents house after one is stable in ones career and is ready mentally and physic...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, if, so, while, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1565.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 337.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.64391691395 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.20541263424 2.67179642975 83% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.489614243323 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 478.8 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.8024154102 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.333333333 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4666666667 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.33333333333 5.45110844103 43% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.274816270209 0.236089414692 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0887070164343 0.076458572812 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.067746247138 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148127035577 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0792900280751 0.0645574589148 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.93 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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