IELTES Writing Task 1.1
The two tables compare about sales of Fairtrade branded coffee and bananas among 5 nations in Europe in 1999 and 2004, measured in total sale values.
Overall, the figures of sale values of 2 products tended to increase. However, the increases are different among 5 countries, and there is a slightly decrease in bananas sale values in Sweden and Denmark.
The sale values of labelled coffee in UK had a dramatic fluctuation. In 1999, just 1.5 millions of euros were gotten by selling coffee and this rose sharply, reaching the highest number at 20 millions of euros in 2004 among 5 countries. Switzerland hold the 2nd position of earning from selling coffee. In 2004, it got 6 millions of euro, it was twice as much as its number in 1999, which was 3 millions of euros. In contrast, the smallest number was Sweden. There is a slightly increase from 0.8 millions of euros in 1999 to 1 millions of euros in 2004. Denmark and Belgium got 2 and 1.7 millions of euros respectively.
The number of sale of bananas saw a fluctuation in 1999 and 2004 of 5 countries. Switzerland got highest number at 15 and 47 millions of euros in 1999 and 2004. While UK and Belgium saw an increase around 4 millions of euros, Sweden and Denmark decreased around 1 millions of euros.
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- IELTS Writing task 1.0 11
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 139, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('slightly') instead an adjective, or a noun ('decrease') instead of another adjective.
...fferent among 5 countries, and there is a slightly decrease in bananas sale values in Sweden and De...
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Line 3, column 85, Rule ID: CD_DOZENS_OF[1]
Message: Use a singular form of the numeral here: '5 million'.
Suggestion: 5 million
...a dramatic fluctuation. In 1999, just 1.5 millions of euros were gotten by selling coffee and...
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Line 3, column 189, Rule ID: CD_DOZENS_OF[1]
Message: Use a singular form of the numeral here: '20 million'.
Suggestion: 20 million
...sharply, reaching the highest number at 20 millions of euros in 2004 among 5 countries. Switze...
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Line 3, column 249, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'holds'.
Suggestion: holds
... in 2004 among 5 countries. Switzerland hold the 2nd position of earning from sellin...
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Line 3, column 249, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (Switzerland) must be used with a third-person verb: 'holds'.
Suggestion: holds
... in 2004 among 5 countries. Switzerland hold the 2nd position of earning from sellin...
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Line 3, column 319, Rule ID: CD_DOZENS_OF[1]
Message: Use a singular form of the numeral here: '6 million'.
Suggestion: 6 million
...ng from selling coffee. In 2004, it got 6 millions of euro, it was twice as much as its numbe...
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Line 3, column 393, Rule ID: CD_DOZENS_OF[1]
Message: Use a singular form of the numeral here: '3 million'.
Suggestion: 3 million
...s much as its number in 1999, which was 3 millions of euros. In contrast, the smallest number...
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Line 3, column 468, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('slightly') instead an adjective, or a noun ('increase') instead of another adjective.
...he smallest number was Sweden. There is a slightly increase from 0.8 millions of euros in 1999 to 1...
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Line 3, column 495, Rule ID: CD_DOZENS_OF[1]
Message: Use a singular form of the numeral here: '8 million'.
Suggestion: 8 million
...en. There is a slightly increase from 0.8 millions of euros in 1999 to 1 millions of euros in...
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Line 3, column 526, Rule ID: CD_DOZENS_OF[1]
Message: Use a singular form of the numeral here: '1 million'.
Suggestion: 1 million
...e from 0.8 millions of euros in 1999 to 1 millions of euros in 2004. Denmark and Belgium got ...
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Line 3, column 587, Rule ID: CD_DOZENS_OF[1]
Message: Use a singular form of the numeral here: '7 million'.
Suggestion: 7 million
...n 2004. Denmark and Belgium got 2 and 1.7 millions of euros respectively. The number of sale...
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Line 4, column 93, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'got the highest'.
Suggestion: got the highest
...99 and 2004 of 5 countries. Switzerland got highest number at 15 and 47 millions of euros i...
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Line 4, column 122, Rule ID: CD_DOZENS_OF[1]
Message: Use a singular form of the numeral here: '47 million'.
Suggestion: 47 million
...witzerland got highest number at 15 and 47 millions of euros in 1999 and 2004. While UK and Be...
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Line 4, column 205, Rule ID: CD_DOZENS_OF[1]
Message: Use a singular form of the numeral here: '4 million'.
Suggestion: 4 million
...e UK and Belgium saw an increase around 4 millions of euros, Sweden and Denmark decreased aro...
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Line 4, column 262, Rule ID: CD_DOZENS_OF[1]
Message: Use a singular form of the numeral here: '1 million'.
Suggestion: 1 million
...os, Sweden and Denmark decreased around 1 millions of euros.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, while, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 6.8 176% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 33.7804878049 136% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1042.0 965.302439024 108% => OK
No of words: 225.0 196.424390244 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.63111111111 4.92477711251 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.87298334621 3.73543355544 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61635501801 2.65546596893 99% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 106.607317073 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.475555555556 0.547539520022 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 295.2 283.868780488 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 8.94146341463 145% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.948352169 43.030603864 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.1538461538 112.824112599 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3076923077 22.9334400587 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.38461538462 5.23603664747 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 1.69756097561 884% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 3.70975609756 323% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.215688989381 0% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.103423049105 0% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0843802449381 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.15604864568 0% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0819641961636 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 13.2329268293 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 79.6 61.2550243902 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.3012195122 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.28 11.4140731707 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.06136585366 99% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 40.7170731707 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.4329268293 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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