"According to a recent report from our marketing department, during the past year, fewer people attended Super Screen-produced movies than in any other year. And yet the percentage of positive reviews by movie reviewers about specific Super Screen movies actually increased during the past year. Clearly, the contents of these reviews are not reaching enough of our prospective viewers. Thus, the problem lies not with the quality of our movies but with the public's lack of awareness that movies of good quality are available. Super Screen should therefore allocate a greater share of its budget next year to reaching the public through advertising."
In the given argument the author thinks that, quality of super Screen-produced movies are really good on the basis of increment of positive reviews than any other year, which is a baseless assumption. And author also assumes that, more people will come to view the movie if there is proper awareness on how great the movies are.
But before assuming all these, author should actually be able to answer few questions like, What is the percentage increment of the positive reviews? Are those significantly enough to convince people that movies are actually good.
In the statement author just claims that in spite of decreased customers, the percentage of positive reviews increased. But, what he forgot to consider was increase in percentage might actually be due to presence of few people.
On the basis of above assumption, author thinks that lack of awareness among people about the revieWs of the movies is the reason why no. of people decreased which is a vague assumption. There are many factors that can lead to decrement in the no. of people like, people who were interested might have migrated from that place and people currently living there might not be interested in the movies. The theatre is not in feasible distance for the people to come.
And assuming that just allocating more budget for the advertisement, so that the public will be interest is unwarranted. If the super screen was actually good then it would already have enough customers or at least they would be able to retain their previous customers. So,instead of advertising, first they should conduct proper research on what the super screen is actually lacking that resulted in decrement of the people, and work on those aspects.
Hence, in the statement is very obscure and baseless and author should first find out the actual and logical possibilities and reasons,in order to increase their customer.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 315 350
No. of Characters: 1534 1500
No. of Different Words: 155 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.213 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.87 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.542 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 116 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 73 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 57 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 31 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.231 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.648 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.769 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.367 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.643 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.081 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 157, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...f increment of positive reviews than any other year, which is a baseless assumpti...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e those significantly enough to convince people that movies are actually good. ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ficantly enough to convince people that movies are actually good. In the statem...
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Line 8, column 145, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... is unwarranted. If the super screen was actually good then it would already have...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , instead
...e to retain their previous customers. So,instead of advertising, first they should condu...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , in
...al and logical possibilities and reasons,in order to increase their customer.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, hence, if, really, so, then, at least, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1582.0 2260.96107784 70% => OK
No of words: 313.0 441.139720559 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05431309904 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6348589726 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 204.123752495 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.501597444089 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 490.5 705.55239521 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.2294019856 57.8364921388 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.466666667 119.503703932 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8666666667 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.2 5.70786347227 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250012048488 0.218282227539 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0804890017632 0.0743258471296 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0834151777946 0.0701772020484 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12292085214 0.128457276422 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101434420307 0.0628817314937 161% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.3799401198 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 98.500998004 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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