spend more time at family
In modern time, the issue of spending time reasonable of children has become a matter for discussion. Many commentators are of the view that young people ought to use their spare time at parents and other close relatives, and less time outside for amusing purpose. Whereas others feel that this opinion would be unreasonable. Although there are some arguments to accept the first latter opinion, I still support the first former view owing to more convincing reasons.
From an overall perspective, the second view seems to be reasonable simply because spend more time outside could improve the social life of young people. To illustrate, entertaining outside activities could help young people to have more friends while they stay at home lead to them losing social contacts with friends. Thus, they would not only be less fall into social isolation but also suffer mental diseases and autism.
In spite of the argument above, I support the first view for the following reasons. The first reason is that spend more time at home could enhance the strengthening of family relationships. In evidence, the generation gap between parents and their offspring would come common in contemporary society. Therefore, spend more time at home could not only be a good way for parents to understand children but also bring happiness to their families. Equally important is that children would distance themselves from social evils. To instance, young people who receive less time attention from their parents usually make friends with bad people. Consequence, it would lead to young people not concentrating on the study, having poor study performance, and impairing job opportunities in their future.
In conclusion, although I recognize possible arguments of the second idea, it seems to me that there are more persuasive reasons to agree with the opposite first view.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, still, then, therefore, thus, whereas, while, in conclusion, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1562.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 299.0 315.596192385 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22408026756 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67813841397 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.551839464883 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 481.5 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.3559922986 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.133333333 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9333333333 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.06666666667 7.06120827912 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.319305558575 0.244688304435 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110394442623 0.084324248473 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.140447944579 0.0667982634062 210% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186771001549 0.151304729494 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0830420396126 0.056905535591 146% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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