Arctic deer live on islands in Canada's arctic regions. They search for food by moving over ice from island to island during the course of the year. Their habitat is limited to areas warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed and cold enough, at least some of the year, for the ice to cover the sea separating the islands, allowing the deer to travel over it. Unfortunately, according to reports from local hunters, the deer populations are declining. Since these reports coincide with recent global warming trends that have caused the sea ice to melt, we can conclude that the purported decline in deer populations is the result of the deer's being unable to follow their age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
Global warming has been a tremendously rising issue that has had detrimental effects on the living. A similar consequence of this issue has been presented in the above argument regarding the decline of number of deer populations in a particular region that hindered the migration and search for food. However this consequence cannot be solely related to the only evidence provided in the argument. The coming paragraphs provide examples that should be considered that can also result into decline of the deer populations.
The first and the most serious evidence that would be needed to ensure is that there is no invasion of any other predator species in the Arctic region. Due to changing trends in global warming, there might be a possibility of migration of a predator species which can consume the deer habitats for their survival. This might also lead to a decrease in their population even if the habitats are still capable of carrying out their travel across the frozen sea.
Now if we consider that the deer populations are still effective in carrying out their age old migration patterns we yet need evidence to ensure that there are sufficient food resources available to them for their survival on the other part of the island. There are chances that they may cross over the frozen sea and yet there may be a dearth of food resources that may lead to an insufficient consumption and thereby a decline in their number by starvation.
Even if we consider that the above argument presented is true, we need sufficient evidence to ensure that the changing trends due to global warming is specifically causing any effects in that particular area. There may be a possibility that the local hunters observing a decline in the population number and the changing trends are a mere coincident and though the deleterious effects of global warming are rife may not be that severe or leading to melting of sea cover in the arctic regions of Canada.
All this evidence shows that there may also be other factors that may contribute to the decline in the habitat population. The evidence taken into consideration in the argument may however be related to the issue but not necessarily be the only responsible factor to the consequence.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 378 350
No. of Characters: 1836 1500
No. of Different Words: 161 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.409 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.857 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.678 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 137 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 101 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 69 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 29.077 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.418 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.846 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.375 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.647 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.124 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 302, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...ered the migration and search for food. However this consequence cannot be solely relat...
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Line 7, column 269, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ibility that the local hunters observing a decline in the population number and t...
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Line 9, column 200, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...n in the argument may however be related to the issue but not necessarily be the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, regarding, so, still
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 28.8173652695 115% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 16.3942115768 134% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1871.0 2260.96107784 83% => OK
No of words: 378.0 441.139720559 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94973544974 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71531819219 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 204.123752495 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.425925925926 0.468620217663 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 603.0 705.55239521 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.8473053892 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.9798054126 57.8364921388 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.923076923 119.503703932 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.0769230769 23.324526521 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.30769230769 5.70786347227 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.129130580022 0.218282227539 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0473237746925 0.0743258471296 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0353371394514 0.0701772020484 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0739155579695 0.128457276422 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0435547064336 0.0628817314937 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 14.3799401198 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 48.3550499002 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.197005988 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 98.500998004 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.1389221557 122% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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