The following appeared as an opinion-editorial in a local newspaper:
In the last 10 years, the number of patrons to the local library has decreased by a factor of 5, while during that time the number of purchases of electronic books has increased by a factor of 10. The director of the library believes that the cause of the decrease in patrons is due to the library not advertising as effectively as do online merchants that sell electronic books. Therefore, the library should double the amount of money that it spends on advertising, so that more patrons will frequent the library.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to help evaluate the recommendation, and whether the argument is reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions help to determine the extent to which the recommendation is justified.
According to the opinion-editorial in a local newspaper, where it is clearly stated that because of the decline in the number of patrons to the local library by a factor of 10 in past few years, there should be a dire need to double the amount of money that it spends on advertising, so that more patrons will visit the library. However, the argument is based on number of assumptions which arises lot of questions which would need to be answered and there is a necessity for further investigation to evaluate the soundness of the argument.
Firstly, the author mentions in the opinion-editorial that there is decrease by a factor of 5 in the number of patrons to the local library whereas there is increase by factor of 10 in the number of purchases of electronic books. In this statement he does not mention the exact figure of number of decrease and increase of patrons and purchasers respectively. So here question arises how many patrons decrease in this period? or how many purchasers increase in this period? Suppose if number of patrons to the local library are 5 in 1990 and after ten years these will decrease to 1 then, it is not of much significance. Yes, if number of patrons to the local library are 5000 in 1990 and after ten years these will decrease to 1000, then it requires immediate measures to be taken to increase the patrons. Similarly, if there is increase of Large amount of purchasers only then its a topic of worry for library authorities. So to bolster his argument he must have to mention the exact figures in counting numbers so that readers can get the exact idea.
Secondly, the author says in the opinion-editorial that there increase in number of purchasers of electronic books which is the cause of his worry. As there is increase in technology and due to obsequious electronic media people now become use to it and uses it for their comfort and benefit. now here the question arises which is more comfortable to study library or home? Obviously home . so the patrons avoid the library perhaps its dilapidated condition is the reason or it is not providing more facilities to its patrons that's why they have decided to buy electronic book and study in cozy environment which is their home.
Furthermore, the author adds in the opinion-editorial there should be a need of advertising the library so that it will attract the patron. But here question arises what if people deliberately ignore it? what if they do not want to come there and avail its services? will it wastes its money on advertisement? here is the best live example, the Maulana Azad library, which is the biggest library of Asia at aligarh Muslim University, aligarh, it is 5 storeys building and has millions of books, research thesis, magazines, ,etc. but still there has been seen a decline in number of patrons in the past two decades and its reason is emerging technology. Everybody wants to save his time and want to study in its comfort zone. author should consider all these evidences.
In conclusion, its author needs to present more evidence to support the assumptions that have been made in the argument to convince us that there should be need to spend double amount on advertising of library, so that more patrons will visit the library. In its present form, the argument is not very strong.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 577 350
No. of Characters: 2679 1500
No. of Different Words: 218 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.901 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.643 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.712 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 186 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 139 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 83 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 32.056 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 18.957 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.722 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.355 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.561 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.146 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 427, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Or
...w many patrons decrease in this period? or how many purchasers increase in this pe...
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Line 3, column 880, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...of Large amount of purchasers only then its a topic of worry for library authoritie...
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Line 3, column 895, Rule ID: WORRY_FOR[1]
Message: The verb 'worry' does not normally take the preposition 'for'. Did you mean 'worry about'?
Suggestion: worry about
... of purchasers only then its a topic of worry for library authorities. So to bolster his ...
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Line 5, column 294, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Now
... uses it for their comfort and benefit. now here the question arises which is more ...
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Line 5, column 389, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...to study library or home? Obviously home . so the patrons avoid the library perhap...
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Line 5, column 392, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...study library or home? Obviously home . so the patrons avoid the library perhaps i...
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Line 5, column 527, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: that's
...roviding more facilities to its patrons thats why they have decided to buy electronic...
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Line 7, column 205, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: What
... what if people deliberately ignore it? what if they do not want to come there and a...
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Line 7, column 268, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Will
...t to come there and avail its services? will it wastes its money on advertisement? h...
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Line 7, column 311, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Here
...l it wastes its money on advertisement? here is the best live example, the Maulana A...
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Line 7, column 523, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ns of books, research thesis, magazines, ,etc. but still there has been seen a dec...
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Line 7, column 726, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Author
... and want to study in its comfort zone. author should consider all these evidences. ...
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Line 9, column 157, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'needed'?
Suggestion: needed
...ent to convince us that there should be need to spend double amount on advertising o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, second, secondly, similarly, so, still, then, whereas, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 11.1786427146 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 28.8173652695 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 90.0 55.5748502994 162% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2742.0 2260.96107784 121% => OK
No of words: 577.0 441.139720559 131% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75216637782 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.90110439584 4.56307096286 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79468268575 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 204.123752495 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.400346620451 0.468620217663 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 883.8 705.55239521 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 78.6531219978 57.8364921388 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.25 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0416666667 23.324526521 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.79166666667 5.70786347227 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.25449101796 247% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.32599146813 0.218282227539 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0939691676109 0.0743258471296 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116550183376 0.0701772020484 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17204054946 0.128457276422 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.119346481898 0.0628817314937 190% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.3550499002 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 12.5979740519 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 98.500998004 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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