obesity and solution
In this modern era, children, unfortunately, endure some ailments that they are known as adults aches such as overweight. There are various reasons behind it. this illness originates from diet, sedentary lifestyle and genetics. I believe that three critical reasons of unhealthy diet, sedentary lifestyle and genetics considerably contribute to the development of such diseases in teenagers.
The first cause of obesity is fatty food. Todays, most of the children are interested in junk food and fizzy drinks like sandwiches, chips and coke. these kinds of foods are not nutritious. Furthermore, a huge amount parents by fast food for their children instead of preparing calorie-rich food at home. this issue can be solved by purchasing food from traditional restaurants (that they cook local foods), banning junk foods and advertising healthy foods in media, schools and textbooks.
The second reason for obesity is an inactive lifestyle. The use of technological devices has gradually risen among children. they spend most of the time watching TV or playing video games on a computer, so the progress of these tools has led to declining the physical activities. this obstacle can be resolved by paying attention to bodily activities in schools and encouraging children to participating in sporting events. Moreover, parents can restrict playing video games on weekdays. In addition to this, the government can compel mass communication to advertise physical exercises.
The third reason of obesity is genetics. Although genetics play a significant role in obesity of children, we cannot change or fortify our genetics. But human beings especially parents must visit genetics experts or do genetics tests before their child is born.
In conclusion, obesity derives from several much components like foods, sedentary lifestyle and genetics. any type of these elements demands effective solutions to cure this organic disorder.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, moreover, second, so, third, in addition, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1652.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 296.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.58108108108 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89452511777 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.625 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 508.5 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.6068949819 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.6 106.682146367 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.8 20.7667163134 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.65 7.06120827912 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.139813011455 0.244688304435 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0470909453566 0.084324248473 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0750574179152 0.0667982634062 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.085602217479 0.151304729494 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0772624637507 0.056905535591 136% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.0946893788 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 48.81 50.2224549098 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.49 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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