have a pet
It goes without saying that in the course of history, parents always have been preoccupied with disciplining their progenies. In this vein, teaching children that how to be responsible is one of the most important aspects of parents' efforts. I, personally speaking, think that having a pet and taking care of that can be a good way for children to learn responsibility and the reasons to support my view point are mentioned in the following paragraphs.
First and foremost, children learn responsibility by paying attention to their pet. At first, children may see the pet as a toy by which they can play. But, learning about how to take care of that pet leads children to have commitment about living creatures. Most children know that how does it feel when to be sick. When a pet needs some treatments, children understand that taking care of a pet includes attending to their pet when it is ill or injured. Also, by seeing their pet's in a bad condition, they learn to be empathy. So, kids learn that in order to have a healthy pet, they must not only tolerate unpleasant situations, but take some times for them. In this manner, children learn responsibility involves taking the time for each other and paying attention to beings' feelings.
The second reasons is that having a pet learns children to become aware of the positive and negative consequences of their acts. When a child sees what happens as a result of his actions, he learns that if he do his job well, he would get a positive result and if he do his job poorly, he would feel the pain of a negative consequence. For instance, when the pet is hungry, the child knows he must feed his darling since, he understands how hunger feels. So, when the kid fills the bowl of his pet, it becomes happy by eating his food and the child can understand the positive result of his action. On the other hand, when the kid does not feed his doggy, he can see the pet is languid and he can not play with it anymore, even it would die, thus, the kid understands the consequence of his action is that his doggy dies.
In conclusion, I think having a pet makes our child a responsible person since, it not only teaches them pay attention to others, but also shows them the good and bad consequences of their activities.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 63, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[7]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put between 'have' and 'been'.
Suggestion: have always been
... that in the course of history, parents always have been preoccupied with disciplining their pro...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nd paying attention to beings feelings. The second reasons is that having a pet ...
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Line 3, column 210, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'does'.
Suggestion: does
...lt of his actions, he learns that if he do his job well, he would get a positive r...
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Line 3, column 268, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'does'.
Suggestion: does
...e would get a positive result and if he do his job poorly, he would feel the pain ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d bad consequences of their activities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, so, thus, well, for instance, i think, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1866.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 409.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.56234718826 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61351695696 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.462102689487 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 550.8 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.4398379635 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.764705882 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0588235294 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.316077852306 0.236089414692 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131649001471 0.076458572812 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0982306270274 0.0737576698707 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215703818288 0.150856017488 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0700606870168 0.0645574589148 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 72.5 58.1214874552 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.46 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.1 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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