. The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
The above lines depicting that the luxuries and conveniences during the modern times prevent the people from developing into strong and independent individuals is a very subjective topic to be discussed. Urbanization and Rapid Industrial Revolution has been a boom to the socio economic and cultural life of the people across the globe. Such rapid develpment in technology in the modern times have made it easier for a lot of people on a diurnal basis making the world a better place to live.The advent of mobile communication, the internet and many more are some of the best examples showcasing how urbanisation made it convenient for loads of people in the world. Decades ago, for communicating through phones people used to wait for a long time for their call to get connected to the other station thereby making it difficult for them to convey messages.
The inception of mobile communication and satelite communication systems has not only improved their communication sectors but also enhaced an improved way of life to its people. Improved technoloical sector had also educated on various levels on how to tackle the growing concern of Climate Change. The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life has also helped women come into their own. The role was limited to their homes looking after various household avtivities toiling over the kitchen. Now that various modern equipements such as microwaves, washing machines have come into picture, it had made life easier for them to look after the household activities and to work on the education as well to flourish their career.
On the contrary, these modern inventions also had an adverse affect on way of life for most of its people. With technology and science being utterly advanced, most of them have been using it for purposes which demands them to put in their physical effort. People shun off such kind of activities by incorporating various technologies thereby increasing lassitude amongst them. In the ancient times, people used their own memory for various math calculations. Now with the invention of calculators, people have gotten accustommed to them by using them for even the simplest of calculations thereby tending towards convenience and not putting their mind to work. Many kids nowadays also refrain from taking up outdoor sports now that they got themselves addicted to various indoor video games making them lazy and preventing them from developing into strong individuals.
In conlusion, though urbanisation and technology had improved the lives of the people, the luxuries and conveniences provided by it had in return led them to slack over the simplest of issues thereby preventing people from developing into strong and independent individuals for the future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, so, well, kind of, such as, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 19.5258426966 36% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 12.4196629213 0% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 58.6224719101 123% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2317.0 2235.4752809 104% => OK
No of words: 443.0 442.535393258 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.230248307 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84819675859 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507900677201 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 738.9 704.065955056 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.0330253846 60.3974514979 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.8125 118.986275619 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.6875 23.4991977007 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.21951772744 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276796896965 0.243740707755 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0996434279558 0.0831039109588 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115995601467 0.0758088955206 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192733010481 0.150359130593 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0723794642887 0.0667264976115 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 14.1392134831 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 48.8420337079 73% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.1743820225 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 12.1639044944 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.47 8.38706741573 113% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 100.480337079 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 11.8971910112 168% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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