Agree or Disagree: Parents today are more involved in their children's education than parents were in the past.
From a broad perspective, in the current state of affairs we face, in which the competition and technology become integral parts of every single relationship, it is not far-fetched to presume that education, especially children's education plays an essential role in maintain the social development. among various educational issues, the issue regarding the role of parents is a contentious topic. there is a growing segment part of people who contend that parents today are more involved in children's education than the past due to the abundant resources. however, I repudiate with this idea. In the ensuing paragraph, the rationale behind this statement will be further elaborated.
First, parents need to focus mainly on their works. Along with the acceleration in social development, people, especially young people who have children, are in the face of the increasingly intense competition. they need to work hard and make full use of their time to guarantee a decent life, causing them heavier pressure than before. however, the participation in children's education requires tremendous energies and time, which contradicts to the purpose of their hard works. How could the parents keep a good balance between their work and children’s education, especially in a world filled with pressure? Consequently, in order to provide their children with a rich living substance, parents are more likely to give top priority to their works. For example, since my younger brother was born, my parents have suffered from intensely financial pressure. As a result, the responsibilities of taking care of my brother and even educating him were laid on my shoulder, for my parents needed to work extremely hard to provide us with money.
Second, teachers play more pivotal role because children spend more time in school. there is no doubt that due to the advancement in teaching ability, teachers are capable of professional education knowledge, not only in book knowledge but also in life experience. it is usually a wise choice for parents to transfer their children to teacher's hands. For instance, according to a survey conducted by the China education Association, which polled over 1000 students all over the country, eighty percent of respondents confessed that the time they spent with their teachers ranked first among all people.
Last but not least, technology occupies children's most leisure time. Some technologies, such as computers and cell phones, appeal to young children, leaving them exposed to the increased risk of excessive addiction. For many children, it is only when they surf the Internet that they have the feeling of freedom and excitement. At the virtual world, they are encouraged to play the center and emperor of this world. Without any control from others, the odds are that hopelessly are hopelessly addicted to the virtual world because children lack adequate ability to distinguish right from wrong.
In conclusion, taking above into consideration, we can safely come to the conclusion that the participation of parents in children's education is becoming decreased due to the fierce pressure, professional teachers and technology's appealing.
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- Agree or Disagree: Parents today are more involved in their children's education than parents were in the past. 90
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, regarding, second, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, no doubt, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 80.0 52.1666666667 153% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 8.0752688172 322% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2697.0 1977.66487455 136% => OK
No of words: 499.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.40480961924 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72634191566 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93879695865 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 276.0 212.727598566 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553106212425 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 830.7 618.680645161 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.3066769758 48.9658058833 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.260869565 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6956521739 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.08695652174 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.328465621149 0.236089414692 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0923701251331 0.076458572812 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0878122148566 0.0737576698707 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166116801445 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0760918222629 0.0645574589148 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.04 10.9000537634 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.14 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 141.0 86.8835125448 162% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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