Advertisements have impacted our modern world. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of advertisements.

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Advertisements have impacted our modern world. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of advertisements.

It is argued that one of the most ways to influence in the new world is announcements, and this essay will clear both views the merits and demerits of advertisemnets. Firstly will discuss how did the producers made people want to buy their products. Then talk about how advertisement can turn some persons to be shopaholics, followed by a reasnable conclusion.

To begin with, advertisements help a lot of people to know the choices that they have, and that is important because there are variety of products in the market, and without advertising activities we would have less choices. In other words, advertisements raised the awareness of customers which is very important to inhancing the purchasing consumer behaviors. A good example for that, because of an awareness campaign started in 2018 by the government of egypt, and it lasted for 6 months, it resulted in an reduce the number of teenagers takeing meals in fast food restauratns, which is mean that advertisements helped people to spend less money on unhealthy products.

On the other hands, if the advertisements exceeded the limit what it is made for, it can turn people to be a shopaholic, who are buying any things without any sense or need. To illustrate, magazines and media full with celebrity have the most modern versions of cars and clothes, which that is influencing in youngsters to spend their money to celebrities tradition. A prime example is, many people can buy a new car they just see it in a magazine just because they want to have the latest model, instead of thinking if what they have is a good or not.

In conclusion, advertisements can be a double-adged tool wich is infuelce in our life, and it is have a lot of amazing uses, but on the other side, it can be used in awful way, that it is should be used wisely.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, so, then, in conclusion, in other words, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1500.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 315.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7619047619 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92853658516 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539682539683 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 460.8 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 0.809619238477 741% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.2975951904 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.4777645089 49.4020404114 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 150.0 106.682146367 141% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.5 20.7667163134 152% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.8 7.06120827912 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.01903807615 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162196119109 0.244688304435 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0599119417456 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0319478894532 0.0667982634062 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0901692292008 0.151304729494 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0098506883762 0.056905535591 17% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.47 50.2224549098 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.92 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.1190380762 142% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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