It is more important to keep your old friend than it is to make new friends.
Views differ when it comes to importance of friend in people's lives. Plenty of people are inclined toward the idea that it is better to keep your relationship with your old friends compare to making new friends. However, some others may take an opposite viewpoint and believe that it is more beneficials to find new friends than to save your touch with your old friends. In my perspective, there are more advantages in making new friends in relations to keep your old friends. I will pinpoint the most outstanding reasons in the following paragraphs.
The first exquisite point worth mentioning is that after a time, people will lose their old friends. It is obvious that old friends have a great effects in people's lives since they will help you when you face a problem in your lifes. But there will be a time that people will lose their touch with their old friends. Many people after getting acceptance in univeristy will locate to another citiy and miss the chance to hang out with their friends. Therefore, they will meet other people and socialize with them and after that become friends with them. Moreover, great number of people will get married and because of the finance issue of our societies have to work hard to provide good facilities for their family. So, they do not have time to spend with their old friend and will find new friends in their work environments. For example, one of my friends got married last year and since then I did not see him. He has to work hard to earn enogh money for his family and is hanging with his cow-workes to came up with idea to increase his salary.
The further subtle point worth mentioning is that finding new friends will help people to progress and imporve their knowledge. Nowadays, with the development of technology, a person who has more information have a better chance to find better job. Because of that many people will make new friend and communicate with them to enhance their infromation and become knwoledgeable. For instance, when I got a career, my colleuges have more experience than me. Therefore, I tried to be friend with them to learn more about their skills and their last experience. Moreover, many people travel abroad to make new friends since they will learn about their culture and tradition. By this way, they acquire a better perspective about the universe that they live in.
To make a long story short, based on the aforementioned arguments, it is extremely crucial to make a new friends rather than keep our old friends since not only people will lose their old friends but also new friends aid them to increase their knowledge and gain a better understanding.
- TPO 5 3
- People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment doing thing they like to do rather than doing things they should do 61
- Agree or disagree At universities and college sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support 73
- People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment doing thing they like to do rather than doing things they should do 66
- Agree or disagree At universities and college sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support 76
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 106, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'friend'?
Suggestion: friend
..., it is extremely crucial to make a new friends rather than keep our old friends since ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, as to, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2189.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 461.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74837310195 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63367139033 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49063916299 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.440347071584 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 656.1 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.6813326525 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.5 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9545454545 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 11.8709677419 177% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.410783735085 0.236089414692 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.148284052656 0.076458572812 194% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.149712283459 0.0737576698707 203% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.352403825604 0.150856017488 234% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.17628641057 0.0645574589148 273% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.33 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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