Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.
Hitherto, there are several conceptions on the children’s education to valuable grown-ups in the future. On the one hand, there are some perspectives that we should encourage children to have a sense of competition, while on the other hand, they assume that co-operation is what children need.
With regard to the competition, I can notice some points from the supporters about the benefits of it. As a matter of fact, the rivalry takes on the role of motivation for the children’s advancement. The fair competition between youngsters with their friends or classmates might raise their endeavor to accomplish achievement. However, the challenge should only be supported in a suitable level, if we put too much pressure on the kid to be better or outstanding for the long-term, it will be counter-productive and even adversely affect their mental health. In that case, your kid will grow up as an individual who is full of envy, always desire more and hardly acknowledge his place or what he owns.
In my opinion, I stick to the state that collaboration is the element children need to be trained in. In my country, there is a statement that “if you want to go rapidly, go alone. But if you want to go far, go together”. Therefore, I have a great belief that the children who perceive how to co-work with others might be helpful and successful afterward. In fact, each individual can not be perfect, they need their collaborators for team-working to complement and complete the errand in the fastest and optimal manner. Moreover, children with a sense of co-operation are usually known as the ones who are open-hearted, willing to share and have sympathy.
In conclusion, it can not be denied that competition is a part of our life for development. However, it needs to be encouraged and controlled to follow the fair direction. Additionally, co-action is immensely necessary for children to become useful adults.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 103, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...element children need to be trained in. In my country, there is a statement that “...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, while, in conclusion, in fact, as a matter of fact, in my opinion, with regard to, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1609.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 321.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01246105919 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12850457596 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557632398754 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 498.6 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.1675699479 49.4020404114 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.5625 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0625 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.9375 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.298468973565 0.244688304435 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0889757401483 0.084324248473 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.077145959155 0.0667982634062 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188415644533 0.151304729494 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0566423606106 0.056905535591 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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