People are living longer. Some people think that it causes big problems. Others, however, think the aging population has many advantages for business, government and society in general. Discuss both views and give your opinion
Many people believe that the longer life span of humans can create many thorny problems. Nevertheless, others suggest that this can also bring many advantages for both business and government sectors as well as society. This essay will discuss both viewpoints and feature my own opinion.
There are reasons why many hold a belief that the ageing population is a problem. Firstly, it adds pressure on the welfare state when budgets are stretched thin because the greying population drive up medical and pension payments. Secondly, that people live longer may lead to a higher retirement age, which means people would be in the job market for a longer duration. If the world of work fails to create new jobs, the end result can be fewer jobs available to younger people.
On the contrary, other people believe in the benefits that the ageing population can bring to business, government and society. From a business perspective, companies can capitalise on products and services that cater to older people. More importantly, our ageing population can be an economic powerhouse, which is no doubt a good thing for any government. In the longevity economy, more people can take part in economic activities and spend money, which is definitely positive for the economic growth. For society, older people have a wealth of skills and experiences; in addition, they are a living museum of old values and traditions. Their longer life expectancy helps survive good values and traditions which always face the risk of being forgotten.
In conclusion, I believe that longer lives do pose challenges to the earth which is already a very crowded place. However, this is an irreversible trend which also carries with it many benefits.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 23, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun hold seems to be countable; consider using: 'many holds'.
Suggestion: many holds
... own opinion. There are reasons why many hold a belief that the ageing population is ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, may, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, well, in addition, in conclusion, no doubt, as well as, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 41.998997996 55% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1451.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 283.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12720848057 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67337782949 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.597173144876 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 452.7 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 24.2868048308 49.4020404114 49% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 96.7333333333 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8666666667 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.8 7.06120827912 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.275383737026 0.244688304435 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0918598718028 0.084324248473 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.06739583702 0.0667982634062 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161503420749 0.151304729494 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0684074345511 0.056905535591 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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