People should choose their course of study not on the basis of their own interests, but based on the kinds of jobs they can get.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
It is commonly perceived that academic careers should be chosen for one's future development regardless of his or her personal taste. Even though some people believe that selecting studies should be a job-related one, I highly suppose that it is unreasonable.
Generally speaking, there are a number of people who hold the view that the fields of study should be considered to be applied in their future careers. These people present several arguments; but the most persuasive one is perhaps that job-related studies would support graduates to focus on the only one specific profession, which builds up the quality of knowledge leads them to have well-paid jobs. On top of that, these people believe that certain jobs are required a wide range of knowledge since they should deal with one's life or social matters. As a consequence, some professions are required scholars from the same field of majors because their roles and performances would effect on individuals and the communities directly. Take doctors as examples, they should be qualified by medical college and should be trained for a long-term in the hospital-related environments as they handle other's lives.
Despite the aforementioned argument, I believe that the major of learning should be according to one's preferences. The first reason is that as schoolers are commonly under eighteen, they would unsure about their future occupations and careers that they prefer, which means they are not only immature to decide their jobs due to lack of experiences but also they should not be enforced to choose their professions in their early ages. As an excellent illustration, a plethora of young adults in Korea suffers from unemployment issues since these young generations do not satisfied with jobs that are related to their academic careers, and dream other fields of occupations. Besides, there is a lack of opportunities to get certain jobs even though people study those sectors for long periods; especially, governors and policemen. Last but not least, students have the right to opt what they want to learn, which should not be pushed by external pressures because it would be a huge burden on individuals that even discourage them to perform educational activities.
In conclusion, it can be observed that although some people argue that people should choose what to learn according to their occupation, in my point of view, I conceive that people have the freedom to select whichever they want to be educated, owing to the reasons discussed above.
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Message: Did you mean 'affect'?
Suggestion: affect
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Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...ajor of learning should be according to ones preferences. The first reason is that a...
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Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to accord'.
Suggestion: to accord
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, so, well, in conclusion, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 13.1623246493 175% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 7.30460921844 260% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 48.0 24.0651302605 199% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2118.0 1615.20841683 131% => OK
No of words: 408.0 315.596192385 129% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19117647059 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84196645941 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526960784314 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 654.3 506.74238477 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.2975951904 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.2606660143 49.4020404114 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 162.923076923 106.682146367 153% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.3846153846 20.7667163134 151% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.38461538462 7.06120827912 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262738906232 0.244688304435 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0983908625285 0.084324248473 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0587725406133 0.0667982634062 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173194745422 0.151304729494 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0577222321831 0.056905535591 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.7 13.0946893788 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 50.2224549098 80% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.32 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 78.4519038076 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.1190380762 142% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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