In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?
Many words of encouragement are constantly given to children by adults and the media. In some societies, the most common message is to try hard in order to reach any goals in life. This statement has positive and negative effects on children if followed and lived by.
Undoubtedly, the mindset that anything can be achieved if one tries hard is positive encouragement for children. With this message, young people can be hardworking and persevering in their own endeavors. Students in school, for instance, who focused on their studies and did their homework were able to graduate. They understood that if they poured in effort in their studies, they can finish it. Another is that, with this message, children can be more adaptive and resilient. If at some point in their early life they failed, such as in sports or academics, they would try harder again. With the principle that was inculcated in them, they can live with the rigors of life.
However, there may be drawbacks to this message to young minds. The fact that not all things in life can be achieved under certain limiting circumstances. For example, children may work too hard to be a social media influencer, however, with the internet being saturated with many people all over the globe, it may be difficult for them to gain popularity in the area. Sometimes, there is also a lot of competition with peers that can lead other inferior children to give up on their chosen feat. At some point, it leads to frustration and thus becomes an emotional burden that is carried by a child as he or she grows up.
Truly, parents and the media need to be careful in sending this message to young individuals. It is best to give this form of encouragement with guidance and explanation along the way. Most importantly, when these words do not happen in reality, children should be reminded that there are many possibilities in other fields or maybe there is only a little delay in reaching their goals.
To conclude, trying hard to reach one’s goal has a positive effect on the words of children but it could also be imposed too much unto them that can eventually lead to frustrations. Thus it is best to constantly guide young people along the way in order for them to understand the real essence of achievement.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 292, Rule ID: DID_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean 'be'?
Suggestion: be
...on their studies and did their homework were able to graduate. They understood that ...
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Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...little delay in reaching their goals. To conclude, trying hard to reach one’s ...
^^^^
Line 9, column 184, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...at can eventually lead to frustrations. Thus it is best to constantly guide young pe...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, thus, for example, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 13.1623246493 175% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 24.0651302605 170% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 41.998997996 155% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1892.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 395.0 315.596192385 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78987341772 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66368818333 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516455696203 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 578.7 506.74238477 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.1772323586 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.6 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.75 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.65 7.06120827912 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.291097798597 0.244688304435 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0961277957463 0.084324248473 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0643574642479 0.0667982634062 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163010435001 0.151304729494 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0758547124255 0.056905535591 133% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.0946893788 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 12.4159519038 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 292, Rule ID: DID_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean 'be'?
Suggestion: be
...on their studies and did their homework were able to graduate. They understood that ...
^^^^
Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...little delay in reaching their goals. To conclude, trying hard to reach one’s ...
^^^^
Line 9, column 184, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...at can eventually lead to frustrations. Thus it is best to constantly guide young pe...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, thus, for example, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 13.1623246493 175% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 24.0651302605 170% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 41.998997996 155% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1892.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 395.0 315.596192385 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78987341772 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66368818333 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516455696203 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 578.7 506.74238477 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.1772323586 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.6 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.75 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.65 7.06120827912 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.291097798597 0.244688304435 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0961277957463 0.084324248473 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0643574642479 0.0667982634062 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163010435001 0.151304729494 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0758547124255 0.056905535591 133% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.0946893788 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 12.4159519038 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.