No one can deny that there are both positive and negative aspects to children playing computer games. Some will argue that because playing computer games enhances the intellectual capacity of the children and due to this it be allowed. However, If i were to choose, i would strongly agree that playing computer games is a waste of time and children should not be allowed to play them for a number of reasons which i will develop in subsequent paragraphs.
No one can deny that there are both positive and negative aspects to children playing computer games. Some will argue that because playing computer games enhances the intellectual capacity of the children and due to this it be allowed. However, If i were to choose, i would strongly agree that playing computer games is a waste of time and children should not be allowed to play them for a number of reasons which i will develop in subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, playing computer games engenders distraction and it is time wasting. When chlidren really get inured into playing computer games, they get distracted from their studies and they end up playing these games for hours when they should be reading their books. I have to admit my opinion on this subject has been profoundly influenced by my own personal experience. You see, some years back when i was in school, i so much indulged into playing computer games and my parents did allow me. Hours that i should to study my books i would devote it into playing games. When my high school results came out, i performed woefully and i had to repeat the class. Had it been i did not play these computer games when i should be studying, i would not have repeated the class. As a result of this, playing games will lead to distraction and hence, will lead to children failure in school.
Secondly, palying computer games will make the children to be disobedient to their parents and children should not be allowed to play this game. When children play these games, they have their eyes so fastened to it that when their parents call on them, they tend not to answer. Drawing from my personal experience, some years back when i was so much into playing these games, i found out that i was disobedient that when any one calls me i will refuse to answer and it gave bad impression about me from people. For this reason, computer games should not be allowed for children.
In the light of the above mentioned reasons, i strongly agree that playing computer games by children should not be allowed.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, however, if, really, second, secondly, so, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1691.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 364.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.6456043956 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40702458629 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 212.727598566 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.43956043956 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 504.9 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.4912206094 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.6875 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.75 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.75 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.5376344086 307% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.51439353085 0.236089414692 218% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.222798937638 0.076458572812 291% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.177672593997 0.0737576698707 241% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.392663796304 0.150856017488 260% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.205812371439 0.0645574589148 319% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.99 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.11 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 86.8835125448 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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