The personal information of many individuals is held by large internet companies and organisations. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?
The advent of information technology has transformed the way people live. While there are some benefits to collecting personal information, I believe that such information is more likely to be used to manipulate the public.
Admittedly, collected information can be utilised to make life easier. In the past, people spent more time choosing books to read, finding restaurants to dine and planning trips. Today, people leave their “digital trails” about what they do online, which is collected, stored, and analysed by complex, sophisticated algorithms. Based on the data collected, computers will offer unique suggestions to each individual. For example, Netflix usually offers informed recommendations to audiences as to which movies suit their taste. The collection and exploitation of personal information has therefore made life more convenient.
However, I believe that people now have less control over their lives in this contemporary society. Many decisions made every day are influenced by AI to some extent. Today, advertisers often target vulnerable groups of customers by showing them the appealing images of their products, as in the case of many alcoholics seeing spirits advertising everywhere. In the same way, companies and organisations that have data can manipulate people, subtly nudging them towards certain schools of thought. A clear illusion of this is that advertisers may show Facebook users the information they want them to read, and subsequently change their attitudes towards a social issue such as the 2016 presidential election.
In conclusion, I believe that the collection of personal information is more worrying than beneficial. At a grassroots level, people should be wary of sharing their information when they are online.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, so, therefore, while, as to, for example, in conclusion, such as, in the same way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1500.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 268.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.59701492537 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04607285448 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0697777295 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.626865671642 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 470.7 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.7993088725 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.0 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8666666667 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6 7.06120827912 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135129673365 0.244688304435 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0454950579726 0.084324248473 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0264453573969 0.0667982634062 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0834355709657 0.151304729494 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00841555822995 0.056905535591 15% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.3 50.2224549098 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.9 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.55 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, so, therefore, while, as to, for example, in conclusion, such as, in the same way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1500.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 268.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.59701492537 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04607285448 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0697777295 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.626865671642 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 470.7 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.7993088725 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.0 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8666666667 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6 7.06120827912 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135129673365 0.244688304435 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0454950579726 0.084324248473 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0264453573969 0.0667982634062 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0834355709657 0.151304729494 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00841555822995 0.056905535591 15% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.3 50.2224549098 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.9 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.55 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.