TPO53 Integrated Writing Task
According to the reading, there exist several benefits that imposing extra taxes on cigarettes and unhealthy products. Though the lecture deals with the same subject matter, it argues otherwise.
The lecture counter argues the text with three main points. First of all, although the reading passage states the extra taxes can decrease the willingness for the people who have the unhealthy behavior, the professor states that instead of stopping the behaviors, those people will rather buy the cheaper and low-quality cigarettes and cause more harm to their health. On the other hand, people who buy unhealthy food are likely to keep purchasing expensive foods and thus, cannot afford healthy food.
Moreover, despite the statement in the reading that since the taxes can compensate the medical costs for the people who have unhealthy behaviors, it is fair for society, the professor made explains the claim made in the reading passage is ill-grounded. The taxes are the same for every person, hence, it is a greater burden to people who have low income compared to higher income and it will also be applied to unhealthy food. Accordingly, the taxes are not fair for people who have a lower salary.
Finally, the text claims the taxes can increase the revenue for governments to build public welfares. However, the professor asserts governments will rely on the large amount the tax income and afraid to lose it. Therefore, there will not have policies to limit unhealthy behaviors such as not allowing to smoke outdoor or even in private spaces
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 303, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'smoking'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: smoking
...nhealthy behaviors such as not allowing to smoke outdoor or even in private spaces
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, finally, first, hence, however, moreover, so, therefore, thus, such as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 5.04856512141 158% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 22.412803532 45% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 30.3222958057 73% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1294.0 1373.03311258 94% => OK
No of words: 254.0 270.72406181 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09448818898 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99216450694 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46927928649 2.5805825403 96% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 145.348785872 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.543307086614 0.540411800872 101% => OK
syllable_count: 402.3 419.366225166 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 21.2450331126 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.1188458206 49.2860985944 150% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.636363636 110.228320801 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0909090909 21.698381199 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0909090909 7.06452816374 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 4.45695364238 224% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.27373068433 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.442380735016 0.272083759551 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.168612301008 0.0996497079465 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0971517994984 0.0662205650399 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.261342148129 0.162205337803 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0586733725488 0.0443174109184 132% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.3589403974 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 53.8541721854 89% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.0289183223 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 12.2367328918 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.42419426049 100% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 63.6247240618 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.498013245 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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