If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.
People, all over the world, make their best efforts to improve their abilities and strengths during childhood and school time to meet their dream job in the future. They also have a specific beautiful picture in their minds that including them in a dream office while wearing a big smile on their face and fashionable clothes. With this in mind, some people think it is better to accept a decent job instead of seeking for more satisfying occupation, while others believe otherwise. I subscribe to the latter opinion on the ground of two main reasons I represent hereunder.
To begin with, I believe that the future is far more unpredictable than we think so no one can predict/foretell subsequent occurrence and their effect/efficacies on our life, so I think it is rational to evaluate present offers properly and consider them as a bright chance to enter a new environment with awesome experiences to learn. I have listened to a famous speech from Steve Jobs a most prosperous person in the high-tech field that was about the events we are faced in our life, He said: "we may not figure out the happenings when we experience it, but I believe that these outspread/diffuse dots indeed connect to each other and build our unique life." Considering this speech, the secure vacancies we are faced now, may teach us precious lessons or prepare us for another appropriate position in the future. Imagine a person who wants to be a manager at his or her own restaurant but find a job in a newspaper office as a senior journalist, thus he or she can work there for a period of time to learn more skills including making a proper relationship with others, being accountable, accepting one's own faults, and attempting to progress and learning new things every day that are practical in being better manager in the future. Also, it is possible to do our best and promote so it makes us closer to our dream job. Therefore, as I mention accepting the offered tends to have a lot of fortunes in the following and we must be alert to not miss our chances in the hectic life.
In my opinion, another privilege of not hesitating to accept a decent job is its financial advantages. Every adult whatever young adults who starts to be independent or people who have a family, must pay for the family's living and be responsible. I think in this critical situation people should not run/take a risk by losing the existing vacancy and seeking a satisfying one optimistically since it may take too long or never happen unfortunately. In today's world the competition to obtain a fine job is increased due to population growth and resource limitation. The better choice is accepting the present occupation and earning money for a living however searching for our dream job, so we do not lose any luck. Moreover, if the existing job is well paying, we can save money in order to start our own business.
To draw a conclusion grounded on the above statements, I believe that join to the present work has some advantages than seeking for better job since the future is unpredictable and we can enjoy the existing vacancy's experiences to become more successful in our dream job in the future.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, thus, well, while, i think, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2628.0 1977.66487455 133% => OK
No of words: 553.0 407.700716846 136% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75226039783 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84932490483 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85419652603 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 291.0 212.727598566 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526220614828 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 846.0 618.680645161 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 20.1344086022 169% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 118.247026918 48.9658058833 241% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 164.25 100.406767564 164% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.5625 20.6045352989 168% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.875 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238025414041 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0792036953611 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0434539828211 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155076786396 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0395265466661 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.2 11.7677419355 155% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.43 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 10.1575268817 152% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 86.8835125448 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 10.0537634409 155% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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