Some people say that the Internet provides with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Today as it is commonly sensed, human beings progress in various fields of science and technology so now we live in the information era. There are different ideas about this available information, Some people believe that this information is valuable and useful, while others believe otherwise. I subscribe to the second idea on the grounds of two reasons I present hereunder.
In the past people were compared with their ability to learn and memorize new ideas and concepts, so students try hard to improve their brain performances with mental calculating, memorizing words, and playing mental games. These activities help people to activate their minds even they are helpful for adults after school. People may think that in today's life these activities like memorizing and remembering are not necessary and they can use the Internet for common information, but In my opinion, if we use the Internet instead of the mind, this makes our mind lazy. The more we use the Internet for most of our needs, the more our mind becomes weak. In this way, people cannot trust their mind skills and use them in every situation, for example, remembering the car's plate number in an emergency situation and remember the face of thieves. In the activities that I mention, the Internet cannot help us so we indeed need our mental abilities in some conditions. Thus we must improve our mental performances and decrease our dependence on the Internet. Thus I think this accessibility to information creates mental problems.
Nowadays the Internet is as common and accessible as humans are swamped with information. We can say we live in the information explosion. We start our day by searching for the daily news in all parts of the world early morning. Our day continues with information about our works and studies. Our thirst for information grows every day. We go from one site to another and the news and information stack in our minds but most of the time we did not need them or use it in our life. At the end of the day, we are tired of the huge amount of data that is not used. This thirst for information makes us tired and less creative because our minds are always processing the new data. As a result, this large amount of information does not help our professional and personal life and only concerns our minds.
To sum up, we are surrounded by a large amount of information that is accessible on the Internet. I do believe that this accessibility makes our mind lazy so we lose mind's ability and cannot enjoy it in many hard and dangerous situations that the Internet cannot help us. Also, a huge amount of information is not used and it means that we just fill our minds. Thus, In my opinion, In this new era of information, access to information creates problems.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, second, so, thus, while, for example, i think, as a result, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 72.0 43.0788530466 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 8.0752688172 260% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2289.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 480.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76875 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68069463864 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68619073405 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.45625 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 729.9 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.0126448104 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.375 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.33333333333 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192643673453 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0719052782798 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0476870710347 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135577973957 0.150856017488 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0128990170062 0.0645574589148 20% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.23 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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