Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition.
We admire famous people one way or the other. Be it Hollywood actors or entrepreneurs, we love to follow them. We admire them and dream of living like them. Especially young people who are yet to face their life think of being famous in a short period. However, they fail to realize the effort behind it, the countless hours of struggle to achieve it. I agree with the prompt that young people should look forward to pursue long-term, realistic goals.
Long term goals have bigger impact and to achieve these goals, one needs to take tiny steps over a very long period which has small impacts individually but when it is aggregated together, it looks huge. A person who targets to achieve long-term goal should have discipline in his/her life. They need to be taken up in small amounts at regular intervals of time. For instance, Mahatma Gandhi led several movements in Indian independence. He took the non-violent route as opposed to his contemporaries who thought they could overpower British in an armed battle. It might seem logical to fight British who used to oppress Indians, ruled them over decades, exploited natural resources available in the country, yet Mahatma Gandhi had a vision to free the country. He took small yet significant steps and united people to take part in his non-violent movements. The important factor which led to the independence was the united India, the weakness using which British had conquered the entire country.
As long as we stay focused on the long-term goal and we take steps to achieve it, we don’t need to bother about distractions in life. A wonderful concept taught in stock market that is applicable in real life is the power of computing. This is used by investors including the famous Warren Buffet, i.e., staying invested for a very long period and let the money grow itself. It is said that 99 percent of his wealth came after his 60th birthday. The same concept holds true in one’s life. Small steps that help in getting a bigger goal would mean, as the time passes, the effort required to do the tasks would be much less than the result. Mainly because long term goals force us to adapt certain habits that builds up as we grow. It shapes our personality. Working on such goals will also help people to experiment a lot of things and have bandwidth to recover if failed. One can try out a lot of new things and even if some of them fail, they will have a longer time to cover the losses.
If people try to be famous in a short period, people might be motivated to undertake unethical practices which might hurt them in the long run. Moreover, such fame lasts only for a short period. It also makes people overconfident. One needs to make careful decisions in every step of their lives no matter how famous they are. It is not true that all famous people do not think of long-term. But most young people simply look at the fame they currently have and simply aim for it. They do not think of the small steps that famous people have taken to be where they are. Moreover, it is possible that they are still working on the long-term goal that they have set. Elon Musk for example is one of the famous entrepreneurs in the world. He is the founder of PayPal, Tesla, SpaceX and many more. His long-term vision may be to transform Earth into using sustainable energy or travelling to another planet or perhaps another universe. With all the businesses that he created, they helped him to learn new things. A few of them failed and a few of them are valued as one of the richest companies in the world.
In conclusion, it is important for young people to understand what is ahead in life. Few things are inevitably a part of life like managing money, health or being independent etc. With social media booming, we admire a lot of people and their fame and dream of achieving it. Those people may be very poor at managing money or they are jobless. Youngsters need to think of where they want to see themselves in 10/15/20 years. For this sufficient and realistic plan needs to be in place and people should work on it constantly, one step at a time.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 246, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...r life think of being famous in a short period of time. However, they fail to realize the effo...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 423, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[7]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'to pursuing'.
Suggestion: to pursuing
...t that young people should look forward to pursue long-term, realistic goals. Long term ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 110, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...eds to take tiny steps over a very long period of time which has small impacts individually bu...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 337, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
... i.e., staying invested for a very long period of time and let the money grow itself. It is sa...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 39, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
... If people try to be famous in a short period of time, people might be motivated to undertake...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 195, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...eover, such fame lasts only for a short period of time. It also makes people overconfident. On...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, still, for example, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.5258426966 154% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 14.8657303371 168% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.3162921348 186% => OK
Pronoun: 79.0 33.0505617978 239% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 104.0 58.6224719101 177% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3403.0 2235.4752809 152% => OK
No of words: 744.0 442.535393258 168% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.57392473118 5.05705443957 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.22267779917 4.55969084622 115% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42779553581 2.79657885939 87% => OK
Unique words: 340.0 215.323595506 158% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.456989247312 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1044.0 704.065955056 148% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 25.0 6.24550561798 400% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 43.0 20.2370786517 212% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.9511071816 60.3974514979 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.1395348837 118.986275619 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3023255814 23.4991977007 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.23255813953 5.21951772744 43% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 22.0 10.2758426966 214% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.83258426966 248% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243393392958 0.243740707755 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0583990654942 0.0831039109588 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0657858985183 0.0758088955206 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153488920291 0.150359130593 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0352506674544 0.0667264976115 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 14.1392134831 62% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 48.8420337079 146% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 12.1743820225 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.93 12.1639044944 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.34 8.38706741573 88% => OK
difficult_words: 135.0 100.480337079 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.8971910112 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 246, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...r life think of being famous in a short period of time. However, they fail to realize the effo...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 423, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[7]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'to pursuing'.
Suggestion: to pursuing
...t that young people should look forward to pursue long-term, realistic goals. Long term ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 110, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...eds to take tiny steps over a very long period of time which has small impacts individually bu...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 337, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
... i.e., staying invested for a very long period of time and let the money grow itself. It is sa...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 39, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
... If people try to be famous in a short period of time, people might be motivated to undertake...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 195, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...eover, such fame lasts only for a short period of time. It also makes people overconfident. On...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, still, for example, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.5258426966 154% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 14.8657303371 168% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.3162921348 186% => OK
Pronoun: 79.0 33.0505617978 239% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 104.0 58.6224719101 177% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3403.0 2235.4752809 152% => OK
No of words: 744.0 442.535393258 168% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.57392473118 5.05705443957 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.22267779917 4.55969084622 115% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42779553581 2.79657885939 87% => OK
Unique words: 340.0 215.323595506 158% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.456989247312 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1044.0 704.065955056 148% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 25.0 6.24550561798 400% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 43.0 20.2370786517 212% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.9511071816 60.3974514979 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.1395348837 118.986275619 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3023255814 23.4991977007 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.23255813953 5.21951772744 43% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 22.0 10.2758426966 214% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.83258426966 248% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243393392958 0.243740707755 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0583990654942 0.0831039109588 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0657858985183 0.0758088955206 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153488920291 0.150359130593 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0352506674544 0.0667264976115 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 14.1392134831 62% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 48.8420337079 146% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 12.1743820225 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.93 12.1639044944 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.34 8.38706741573 88% => OK
difficult_words: 135.0 100.480337079 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.8971910112 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.