Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition
Career is the motivation which drive a person on a pathway which may go from immediate fame or long-term goal's. There is no rigid formula which can identify the future of goal's and motivation behind it. Some goal's before pursuing may occur like long-term but aren't while some may look like immediate fame and recognition but are long term. Goal's varies from person to person and view to achieve it also varies, some choose the decent path to do while some choose chicanery path to pursue it in short amount of time.
First is the example of Ronaldo, he is recognised as one of the best footballer in the world, who have huge amount of fan base as well he earned well known awards in his career. In his teenage, while showing the avidness for football he was suggested by his teacher to pursue career by studying and earning a decent amount of life. But, his enthusiasm choose other path which was steady and slow along with failure's as well as success. Today, he has earned a title of best footballer due his hard work and enthusiasm. What if he would have chosen the path his teacher showed ?
Second is the example of Mrs. Holmes, CEO of defunct start up named as Theranos. This start up was build on the motive of changing the behaviour of medical test and saving time along with the the blood needed to do tests. She performed huge research on the startup's idea and even build a machine which used to do several test's using single vile of blood. She choose this path after doing thorough research but due to inability to achieve the goal within sufficient amount of time frame led to failure.
Third is the example of Bhuvam Bam, the famous and owner of most subscribed channel on YouTube (owned and performed by single person only). He started his channel just for entertainment purpose, but he was not aware of fame and recognition which he will achieve in short amount of time. After analysing, he realized that he can contribute more in the same field of entertainment rather than the career which choose for his graduation. What if he would have done pursued his career in the field of graduation, we would have never witness the amusing skill of him.
I do partially agree with the statement that a individual or young person should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition. But he or should not completely rely on the short term goal completely, as it is in unstable mode. Young person should give his best on both the career and short term goal's. After getting assured on short term goal, a young person can use his fame and recognition to pursue other goal's too.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 260, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: aren't
...e pursuing may occur like long-term but arent while some may look like immediate fame...
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Line 1, column 335, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'termed'.
Suggestion: termed
...diate fame and recognition but are long term. Goals varies from person to person and...
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Line 2, column 465, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'of the best'.
Suggestion: of the best
...s success. Today, he has earned a title of best footballer due his hard work and enthus...
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Line 2, column 529, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had chosen'?
Suggestion: had chosen
...is hard work and enthusiasm. What if he would have chosen the path his teacher showed ? Second i...
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Line 3, column 188, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...medical test and saving time along with the the blood needed to do tests. She performed...
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Line 3, column 188, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...medical test and saving time along with the the blood needed to do tests. She performed...
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Line 3, column 257, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'startups'' or 'startup's'?
Suggestion: startups'; startup's
...sts. She performed huge research on the startups idea and even build a machine which use...
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Message: The pronoun 'She' must be used with a third-person verb: 'chooses'.
Suggestion: chooses
...l tests using single vile of blood. She choose this path after doing thorough research...
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Message: Did you mean 'had done'?
Suggestion: had done
...h choose for his graduation. What if he would have done pursued his career in the field of grad...
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Line 4, column 527, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'witnessed'.
Suggestion: witnessed
...ield of graduation, we would have never witness the amusing skill of him. I do partial...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...partially agree with the statement that a individual or young person should be en...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, may, second, so, third, thus, well, while, in short, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 33.0505617978 109% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 58.6224719101 111% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2166.0 2235.4752809 97% => OK
No of words: 469.0 442.535393258 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.61833688699 5.05705443957 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65364457471 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37789731783 2.79657885939 85% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.475479744136 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 674.1 704.065955056 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.7662151483 60.3974514979 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.4545454545 118.986275619 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3181818182 23.4991977007 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.13636363636 5.21951772744 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 7.80617977528 141% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264773729987 0.243740707755 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0825776916486 0.0831039109588 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.138163164634 0.0758088955206 182% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163375747838 0.150359130593 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.192205141491 0.0667264976115 288% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 14.1392134831 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 48.8420337079 137% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 12.1639044944 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 100.480337079 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.