The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health care system in an effort to deal with the health issues involved. Some people think that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in the school curriculum. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In today's world, the number of obese people is increasing day by day and being overweight is causing some dangerous illnesses that lead to fatal diseases like heart attack, stroke, high blood pressure. Thus, some people think that the key for solving this problem is introducing more physical exercises and sport in the school. However, I believe that a healthy diet can also reduce obesity level.
On the one hand, the government should increase the number of physical lessons in the school education program, because the school is a place where children spend a large part of their time and they are more obedient and can be guided easily by what is taught by their teachers. For example, children who participate in sport trainings are more healthier and have healthier weight since they take more physical exercises than others who get little or almost no exercise. That's why people can control their weight by extra physical lessons.
On the other hand, a healthy diet can cause weight loss. Researchers know that only doing physical exercises is not as effective as dieting combined with exercises. For instant, if we watch any training of athletes, they do not consume any kind of food which they want. Instead, they eat what their doctors recommend. Thus, the best weight-loss plan is one that contains enough nutrients to sustain healthy growth.
To conclude, although I agree that one way to deal with overweight is multiplying extra physical lessons in the school curriculum, I think that the best one is combination diet with physical activities.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 341, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'healthier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: healthier
... who participate in sport trainings are more healthier and have healthier weight since they ta...
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Line 3, column 472, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: That's
...s who get little or almost no exercise. Thats why people can control their weight by ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, so, thus, for example, i think, kind of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 41.998997996 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1309.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 259.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05405405405 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01166760082 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52858908572 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.590733590734 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 388.8 506.74238477 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.608827665 49.4020404114 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.083333333 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5833333333 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.41666666667 7.06120827912 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220564837726 0.244688304435 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0745087831735 0.084324248473 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0849614418952 0.0667982634062 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145360787223 0.151304729494 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0816161584718 0.056905535591 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 78.4519038076 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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