Do you think it is positive or negative development? These days many fathers stay at home and take care of their children while mothers go out to work.
2. It has been common for many fathers to take a parental leave and take care of their children at home while their wives go to work. I believe this phenomenon has a positive effect on the wellbeing of the children. Furthermore, women in the family have the chance to build their career path by sharing half of their responsibilities with their partners.
To begin with, fathers taking some time to stay at home for the development of their children is ,definitely, a good idea. By this way they manage to tie the bond with their children more closely. They will develop great personal relationship with their children by means of which they can help them create a prospective future. Furthermore, by having a close contact with their children they will understand their behavior better and make friendships with them. Thus, they will turn into their children’s closest friends, the path leaders and role models. Moreover, they can help their children to solve critical problems to which children can not find solution by themselves. On the contrary, if the father does not have a close relationship with his child, it may lead the child to suffer from various ailments as depression, anxiety and lack of self-esteem.
Furthermore, by giving their wives the chance to continue working while they look after their children, men can express their ultimate support of their wives. As we know, in an average conservational society girls’ job is to grow up, get married and take care of their children and other family members. However, if their husbands take the charge of looking after children by allowing the wives to go on working, they solidify their relationships of their marriage. Consequently, women try to support their husbands in every aspect of life as well.
Additionally, as the technology has increasingly developed bringing the chance to working from home, for many people, especially, those with younger kids at home it is an awesome opportunity. Both mothers and fathers can manage their work from the distance and spend more quality time with their family.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, furthermore, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, thus, well, while, on the contrary, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 15.1003584229 26% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1738.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 345.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03768115942 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74941554959 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.533333333333 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 519.3 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.8212211489 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.625 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5625 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.125 5.45110844103 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.320020845999 0.236089414692 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126768843117 0.076458572812 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0969730610424 0.0737576698707 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.229748135316 0.150856017488 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0637866759046 0.0645574589148 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.