Some people think that the most important thing about being rich is it gives a person the opportunity to help other people. Do you agree or disagree?
It is assumed that the most indispensable advantage of being wealthy is possessing the capability of assisting other individuals. From my perspective,
I partly agree with this statement.
On the one hand, it is tangible that first and foremost, affluent people are significantly able to benefit themselves. Initially, the more wealth they generate, the more options and opportunities of occupation emerge. These selections and chances are often of higher quality and bring them potential profits in developing their career paths. Besides, the privileged tend to have better health conditions than the general population because they have unlimited access to healthy food choices and fitness training that is not always available to the other social classes.
On the other hand, helping others does play a pivotal role in being rich. This is derived from the fact that in most cases, a wealthy individual accumulates their property from the public. For example, people such as Steve Jobs and Charles Wong attain prosperity by having people splurging money on their products. As a result, they should spend a number of their legacies on taking care of citizens such as donating to charities. This action may upgrade the living conditions and income of the majority. Then the customers will have more budget to purchase their items, which serve their purpose of making profits. Such a cycle is an imperative attribute to running lucrative businesses. Meanwhile, some kind-hearted millionaires make comprehensive impacts in various aspects such as creating more jobs, giving radical solutions to the environment in poor areas. For example, The Bill & Melinda Gates Foundation, founded by one of the most affluent self-made billionaires, has joined hands with many technicians, scientists, and social activists to conduct research and seek methods to eradicate diarrhea in third-world countries.
In conclusion, being rich can not only devote to social but also personal aspects. However, the more important thing about being wealthy is to lend a hand to others.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...ndispensable advantage of being wealthy is possessing the capability of assisting other indiv...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... other individuals. From my perspective, I partly agree with this statement. O...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, if, may, so, then, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in most cases, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1369.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 259.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28571428571 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01166760082 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73191602824 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.644787644788 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 426.6 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.13532079 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.2666666667 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2666666667 20.7667163134 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.13333333333 7.06120827912 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204285734854 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0602692109144 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0636338431818 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105064256972 0.151304729494 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0527063013879 0.056905535591 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.54 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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